Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中出现了词汇错误（如将'singing'误说成'swimming'和'seeing'），导致表达不清晰。建议加强词汇准确性，避免混淆词汇，并简洁明了地表达观点。

例: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my emotions and makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答较为完整，但语法和表达不够流畅，重复使用“when I was in the high school”。建议简化句子结构，注意时态一致，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I took singing lessons in high school because I wanted to attend Berkeley Music College, which was my dream at that time.

提案: 回答不够明确且语法混乱，缺乏逻辑连贯性。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并避免不必要的犹豫和重复。

例: I want to sing for everyone because music can bring joy to all people.

提案: 回答中词汇错误严重（将'singing'误说成'seeing'），表达不清晰且语法错误较多。建议加强词汇准确性，使用具体例子，并注意句子结构的完整性。

例: Yes, I believe singing can motivate people and bring them happiness, especially when they feel sad or lonely.

× Yes indeed, I like swimming very much 'cause I think seeing can express my emotions and I'm very enjoyed when I see it.

✓ Yes indeed, I like singing very much because I think singing can express my emotions and I really enjoy it.

这里'seeing'应为'singing'，因为题目是关于唱歌。'I'm very enjoyed'是错误的表达，正确应为'I really enjoy'，因为'enjoy'是动词，不能用被动形式。

× Yes, indeed. I remember that my mom booked a lesson for me when I was in the high school 'cause I really want to go to the Berkeley Music College.

✓ Yes, indeed. I remember that my mom booked a lesson for me when I was in high school because I really wanted to go to Berkeley Music College.

'I really want'应使用过去时态'wanted'，因为动作发生在过去。'in the high school'中'the'不需要，正确表达是'in high school'。

× As actually I think that's this question may we have not an exactly answer?

✓ Actually, I think we may not have an exact answer to this question.

句子结构混乱，'that's this question may we have not an exactly answer'语序错误，应调整为'we may not have an exact answer to this question'。

× I think seeing can give people more motivation and supportive when they are in the dark side and also the sun which express happiness can give people happy and to support them.

✓ I think singing can give people more motivation and support when they are in the dark, and also the sun, which expresses happiness, can make people happy and support them.

'seeing'应为'singing'。'supportive'应改为名词'support'。'express'应改为第三人称单数形式'expresses'。'give people happy'应改为'make people happy'。句子中多处动词形式和词性使用错误。