Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和表达不够准确，影响了自然流畅度。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和词汇搭配，使表达更自然。

例: No, I don't like singing because I can't control the pitch and rhythm well, which makes my singing sound bad. However, I believe I can improve these skills with practice.

提案: 回答中时态使用不一致，句子结构不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态，简洁表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I only learned singing during my school music lessons and never took extra classes. If I have the chance, I would like to learn singing because I think it brings happiness.

提案: 回答中存在词汇错误（seeing应为 singing），表达不够准确。建议注意词汇使用，句子结构更清晰，表达感情时用更自然的表达。

例: I would like to sing for my parents because singing is a great way to express emotions. I want to show them how grateful I am for raising me.

提案: 回答内容较好，但有语法错误和用词不当（high flow应为 high pitch or melody）。建议注意词汇准确性，句子更简洁自然。

例: Definitely yes. I think the lyrics can bring happiness if people understand their meaning. Even if they don't understand the language, they can enjoy the melody and rhythm.

× No there really because I don't have an accurate control of key and flow which making my singing sounds really bad.

✓ No, really, because I don't have accurate control of key and flow, which makes my singing sound really bad.

这里的错误是动词形式使用不当。'which making' 应该改为 'which makes'，因为主语是单数 'which' 指代 'control'，动词需要用第三人称单数形式。并且 'making' 应该用一般现在时 'makes'，以保持时态一致。

× But I think I can control improve them by practicing.

✓ But I think I can improve them by practicing.

这里 'control improve' 是错误的动词搭配，应该去掉 'control'，直接用 'improve'。因为 'control improve' 不是正确的表达。

× I only learned singing in my school music lesson, but I never learn that after class.

✓ I only learned singing in my school music lesson, but I never learned that after class.

这里时态不一致，前半句用的是过去时 'learned'，后半句也应该用过去时 'learned'，而不是现在时 'learn'。

× I hope if I have the opportunity to learn singing I will attend this because I think singing makes people happy.

✓ I hope that if I have the opportunity to learn singing, I will attend because I think singing makes people happy.

句子结构不完整，缺少连接词 'that'，并且 'attend this' 不够明确，改为 'attend' 更自然。

× Maybe my parents because in my opinion I think seeing is a great way to convey our emotions.

✓ Maybe my parents because, in my opinion, I think singing is a great way to convey our emotions.

这里 'seeing' 应该是 'singing'，是拼写错误，导致代词使用错误。

× So I want to show my parents how gratitude I am for them raising me for such a long time.

✓ So I want to show my parents how grateful I am for them raising me for such a long time.

'gratitude' 是名词，句中需要形容词 'grateful' 来修饰主语 'I'。

× Definitely yes, because I think what's written in the song can bring happiness to people if they understand the true meaning.

✓ Definitely yes, because I think what is written in the song can bring happiness to people if they understand the true meaning.

缩写 'what's' 在正式口语中可以接受，但为了清晰，建议写成 'what is'。

× Even you can't understand the language, you can also understand the high flow and rhyme.

✓ Even if you can't understand the language, you can also understand the high pitch and rhyme.

'high flow' 应该是 'high pitch'，表示高音调，'flow' 用法不当。并且缺少连词 'if'，使句子更完整。