Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然且有些重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并避免语法错误。可以用更自然的表达方式来说明自己不擅长唱歌。

例: I don't really enjoy singing because I'm not very good at it. I often forget the melody, so I don't feel confident singing in front of others.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。建议直接回答问题，并用简单清晰的句子说明学习唱歌的经历。

例: Yes, I learned singing when I was in primary school because I had to prepare for a music exam.

提案: 回答表达了意图，但句子结构和用词不够自然。建议使用更流畅的句子，并适当使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I would like to sing for my boyfriend. I have been practicing some love songs because I want to sing something beautiful for him.

提案: 回答中表达的观点明确，但句子结构不够清晰，且有语法错误。建议使用更准确的句子结构，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness and relaxation to people. When people listen to beautiful songs, they feel pleasant. However, some songs might also make people feel sad.

× I am not the kind of person that is good at singing.

✓ I am not the kind of person who is good at singing.

这里使用关系代词时，应该用who指人，而不是that。虽然that有时也可以指人，但在正式语境中，指人的关系代词用who更合适。

× I just can't remember the melody of that song. But I can't just sing well, so I'm not really into.

✓ I just can't remember the melody of that song. But I can't sing well, so I'm not really into it.

句子中缺少宾语，'I'm not really into'后面应加宾语it，表示对唱歌不感兴趣。

× This brings in mind that I've ever learned singing during my primary school because at the time I need to depart in an exam so I need to have courses about singing.

✓ This brings to mind that I learned singing during my primary school because at that time I needed to prepare for an exam so I needed to have courses about singing.

时态错误，描述过去的事情应使用过去时。'brings in mind'应为'brings to mind'，'I've ever learned'不合适，改为简单过去时learned。'need'应改为过去时needed。'depart in an exam'表达错误，应为'prepare for an exam'。

× This brings in mind that I've ever learned singing during my primary school because at the time I need to depart in an exam so I need to have courses about singing.

✓ This brings to mind that I learned singing during my primary school because at that time I needed to prepare for an exam so I needed to have courses about singing.

短语应为'bring to mind'，而不是'bring in mind'。'depart in an exam'表达错误，应为'prepare for an exam'。

× Probably I want to sing for my boyfriend and I practice my singing because I really want to sing a beautiful song for him.

✓ Probably I want to sing for my boyfriend and I am practicing my singing because I really want to sing a beautiful song for him.

描述正在进行的动作时，应使用现在进行时，'I practice'改为'I am practicing'更符合语境。

× So I just learned some love songs about that.

✓ So I have just learned some love songs about that.

这里强调刚刚学过，使用现在完成时更合适，表示动作对现在有影响。

× Definitely singing could bring happiness, relaxation to people because when people listen to those beautiful songs, they will be pleasant and however also there are some songs that bring frustration to people.

✓ Definitely singing can bring happiness and relaxation to people because when people listen to those beautiful songs, they feel pleasant; however, there are also some songs that bring frustration to people.

'could'表示可能性，语气不够肯定，改为'can'更合适。'they will be pleasant'表达错误，应为'they feel pleasant'。连接词'however'前后应加分号或句号。