Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ภาษาอังกฤษที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือผิดไวยากรณ์ เช่น 'climb' และ 'good running base' ควรตอบตรงประเด็นและใช้ประโยคที่สั้นและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my vocal skills. Additionally, it allows me to socialize with others who share the same interest.

提案: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'learned how to sing' แทน 'learned how to sings' และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหล เช่น 'however' และ 'but' ควรปรับปรุงความชัดเจนของเวลาและแผนการในอนาคต

例: Yes, I learned how to sing a few years ago. However, because of work and studies, I had to stop. But I plan to resume singing lessons in about a month.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น 'audience who care' แทน 'audience that care' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่เหมาะสม เช่น 'waste their times' ควรแสดงความรู้สึกอย่างชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

例: I want to sing for an audience who enjoys my music because I appreciate their support and encouragement.

提案: ควรใช้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'music' เป็นเอกพจน์ไม่ต้องเติม s และใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'because' และ 'since' ควรอธิบายให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music helps people relieve stress. There are many genres that suit different personalities, so everyone can enjoy it.

× Yes, I like to sing because singing helped me feel relaxed and climb and it also enhanced my voice perceptions and skills.

✓ Yes, I like to sing because singing helps me feel relaxed and calm, and it also enhances my voice perception and skills.

The verb 'helped' should be in present tense 'helps' to match the present tense context. 'Climb' is incorrect here; likely intended 'calm'. 'Enhanced' should be 'enhances' for present tense consistency. 'Perceptions' should be singular 'perception' to refer to the general ability.

× And it's also may help me socialize since good running base is a more common methods for thinking.

✓ And it may also help me socialize since a good running base is a more common method for thinking.

The modal verb 'may' should not be combined with 'is' as 'it's may'. Correct form is 'it may'. 'Methods' should be singular 'method' to agree with 'a more common'. 'Good running base' needs an article 'a'.

× Yes, I have learned how to sings last years.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing in the last years.

The verb 'sings' is incorrect; after 'to' the base form 'sing' is used. 'Last years' should be 'in the last years' for correct time expression.

× However, due to the stress of my work and my educations, I have to withdraw singing activities.

✓ However, due to the stress of my work and my education, I have had to withdraw from singing activities.

'Educations' should be singular 'education'. 'Withdraw' requires the preposition 'from' when referring to activities. Present perfect 'have had to' fits better for past action with present relevance.

× But I'm planning to enroll on it afterwards, maybe after four weeks after now.

✓ But I'm planning to enroll in it afterwards, maybe four weeks from now.

'Enroll' is followed by the preposition 'in', not 'on'. 'After four weeks after now' is redundant; correct phrase is 'four weeks from now'.

× I want to sing for the audience that care to listen to my music since I feel so appreciate if someone is there to cheer me up or waste their times listening to my voice which I'm trying to prepare for them as to.

✓ I want to sing for the audience that cares to listen to my music since I feel so appreciative if someone is there to cheer me up or waste their time listening to my voice, which I'm trying to prepare for them.

'Audience' is singular, so verb 'care' should be 'cares'. 'Feel so appreciate' should be 'feel so appreciative'. 'Waste their times' should be 'waste their time'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, absolutely, because there's a lot of music out there and I think many people kill their stress by listening to those music.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because there is a lot of music out there and I think many people relieve their stress by listening to that music.

'There's' is contraction of 'there is' which is correct for singular 'a lot of music'. 'Kill their stress' is incorrect idiom; 'relieve their stress' is appropriate. 'Those music' should be 'that music' as 'music' is uncountable.

× And I think those music also bring happiness to people since there's a lot of genre and it's suits for different quality of personality people have.

✓ And I think that music also brings happiness to people since there are a lot of genres and it suits different personality qualities people have.

'Those music' should be 'that music' as 'music' is uncountable. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular 'music'. 'There's a lot of genre' should be 'there are a lot of genres' for plural. 'It's suits' should be 'it suits'. 'Quality of personality' should be 'personality qualities'.