Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and correct grammar. Try to form complete sentences and explain your reasons more clearly. Avoid redundancy and focus on natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. It also makes me feel happy, especially when I am feeling lonely.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing during my school years. My classmates encouraged me to sing songs, so I gained some knowledge and experience in singing.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure and linking words to connect your thoughts logically.

例: I would like to sing for my family because they have always supported and encouraged me, especially when I am living abroad. Singing for them helps me stay connected and express my feelings.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Focus on giving a clear opinion with reasons and examples. Use simple, correct sentences and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps reduce stress and improve mood during difficult times.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing 'cause it is help to relax and show my emotion and it will be feel happy me when I am missing.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me to relax and show my emotions, and it makes me feel happy when I am missing someone.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'is help' instead of 'helps' and 'will be feel happy me' which is ungrammatical. The verb 'help' should be in third person singular present tense 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'feel' should be used without 'be' and the pronoun 'me' should be placed correctly. The phrase 'when I am missing' is incomplete; adding 'someone' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I learn how to just I have a learn how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'learn' in present tense when referring to a past action. The correct past participle form 'have learned' is needed to indicate the experience of learning in the past.

× How so during my school time, so my classmates are encouraged me for sing the song.

✓ During my school time, my classmates encouraged me to sing songs.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb forms. 'Are encouraged me' is incorrect; it should be 'encouraged me' in past tense. Also, 'for sing the song' should be 'to sing songs' to use the correct infinitive form and plural noun.

× So I have quite taken information regarding singing.

✓ So I have taken quite a bit of information regarding singing.

The phrase 'have quite taken information' is awkward and ungrammatical. Adding 'quite a bit of' clarifies the quantity, and 'have taken' is correct present perfect tense to indicate experience.

× I would like to I would like to want to sing for my family because they help me and encourage me in the out of country so every time they are stay connected with me so it will be happy and express my emotions.

✓ I would like to sing for my family because they help and encourage me when I am out of the country. They always stay connected with me, which makes me happy and allows me to express my emotions.

The original sentence has redundant modal verbs 'would like to want to' which is incorrect; only 'would like to' is needed. 'In the out of country' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'when I am out of the country'. 'They are stay connected' is incorrect verb form; it should be 'they always stay connected'. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× Of course, just thinking is feeling doing.

✓ Of course, just thinking, feeling, and doing.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks proper conjunctions. Adding commas and 'and' clarifies the list of actions.

× You feel very happiness for peoples because of it is help to less success, less address during this day.

✓ You feel very happy for people because it helps reduce stress and sadness these days.

'Feel very happiness' is incorrect; 'happiness' is a noun, but 'feel' requires an adjective like 'happy'. 'Peoples' is incorrect plural; 'people' is the correct plural noun. 'It is help to less success, less address' is ungrammatical and unclear; it likely means 'it helps reduce stress and sadness'. 'During this day' is awkward; 'these days' is more natural.