Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use singular form for 'hobby' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, avoid redundancy and make your answer more natural by combining ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, singing is my favorite hobby because I have enjoyed singing many different songs since I was a child. It always makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve fluency by finishing your thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your answer.

例: Yes, I learned to sing by imitating popular artists in my country when I was a child. Since then, singing has been my way to relieve boredom and express myself.

提案: Good structure and content. To improve, use more precise vocabulary and correct article usage, for example, say 'a mellow, dramatic song' instead of 'music'.

例: I usually sing for myself because it helps me express my emotions. For instance, when I'm happy, I sing energetic songs, but when I'm sad, I prefer mellow, dramatic songs.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clearer explanations.

例: Absolutely, singing can boost your emotions and bring out the best in you. Therefore, it can make people feel excited and full of energy.

× Singing is my #1 hobbies.

✓ Singing is my #1 hobby.

The word 'hobbies' is plural, but it should be singular 'hobby' because it refers to one main interest. The subject 'Singing' is singular, so the complement should also be singular.

× It gives me the happy feeling.

✓ It gives me a happy feeling.

The phrase 'the happy feeling' is incorrect because 'happy feeling' is a general feeling, so the indefinite article 'a' should be used instead of 'the'.

× Yes, I've learned how to sing by copying other artists who were popular in my country and I enjoyed doing that when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I've learned how to sing by copying other artists who were popular in my country, and I enjoyed doing that when I was a kid.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate two independent clauses for clarity. The tense usage is correct here.

× That's why I when whenever I feel bored, I sing and.

✓ That's why whenever I feel bored, I sing.

The sentence has redundant words 'I when' and ends abruptly with 'and.' Removing 'I when' and 'and' corrects the sentence structure and makes it complete.

× I sing for myself. It's one way to express my feelings, my mood.

✓ I sing for myself. It's one way to express my feelings and my mood.

Adding 'and' between 'feelings' and 'my mood' improves the sentence flow and clarity. The original sentence is understandable but can be improved for better conjunction use.

× So whenever I feel happy, I sing an energetic song.

✓ So whenever I feel happy, I sing an energetic song.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× When I'm sad, I sing a mellow, dramatic music.

✓ When I'm sad, I sing mellow, dramatic music.

The word 'music' is uncountable and should not be preceded by 'a.' Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× Absolutely, singing can boost your emotions, your feelings and it will bring it will really bring the best out of you.

✓ Absolutely, singing can boost your emotions and feelings, and it will really bring the best out of you.

The phrase 'it will bring it will really bring' is repetitive and incorrect. Removing the repetition and adding 'and' improves sentence structure.

× So it can make you feel excited, energetic.

✓ So it can make you feel excited and energetic.

Adding 'and' between 'excited' and 'energetic' improves the sentence flow and clarity.