Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating why you like singing, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. For instance, when I sing songs by artists like Shakira, it helps me forget my worries and feel calm.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing, especially during my elementary school music classes. The music teacher taught us to pronounce words correctly while singing, which helped improve our vocal skills.

提案: Your answer is quite long and contains several grammatical errors. Try to keep your response concise and clear, directly answering the question with a topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I enjoy singing for my mother because it makes her happy. For example, I often sing for her on special occasions like her birthday or family gatherings, which she appreciates as a meaningful way to show my love.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Definitely, singing can create a joyful atmosphere and lift people's spirits. For example, when people sing together, it often brings a sense of unity and happiness, making the environment more positive and enjoyable.

× Yes, I like singing so much like singing can help me feel very relaxing.

✓ Yes, I like singing so much because singing can help me feel very relaxed.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'relaxing' (present participle) instead of 'relaxed' (adjective) to describe the feeling. Also, 'like' is incorrectly used to connect clauses; 'because' is appropriate here to show cause and effect.

× I feel no stressful when I sing a song like that is with Shakira you can show off my anxious mind.

✓ I do not feel stressed when I sing a song, like those by Shakira; it helps me calm my anxious mind.

'No stressful' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'stressed'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity and correct grammar.

× If you count our elementary school music class, yes, I had learned how to sing.

✓ If you count our elementary school music class, yes, I learned how to sing.

The past perfect tense 'had learned' is unnecessary here; simple past 'learned' is appropriate for a completed action in the past.

× The musicians teacher also told us to pronounce the correct grammar and the correct word while we sing.

✓ The music teacher also told us to pronounce the correct grammar and the correct words while we sing.

'Musicians teacher' is incorrect; it should be 'music teacher'. Also, 'word' should be plural 'words' to match the context.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing to?

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the singing.

× I really enjoy seeing for my mother because it made her happy and make her feel very well.

✓ I really enjoy singing for my mother because it makes her happy and makes her feel very well.

'Seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. Also, verb tenses need to be consistent: 'made' should be 'makes' to match present tense 'enjoy'.

× I usually sing for her on special occasion like her birthday or family gatherings as she really appreciated it when I performed for her as meaningful way to show my love and get her.

✓ I usually sing for her on special occasions like her birthday or family gatherings as she really appreciates it when I perform for her as a meaningful way to show my love and gratitude.

'Occasion' should be plural 'occasions'. 'Appreciated' should be present tense 'appreciates' to match the habitual action. 'Performed' should be 'perform'. 'Get her' is incorrect; 'gratitude' fits the context.

× Definitely, seeing can create a joyful atmosphere and left people's bears.

✓ Definitely, singing can create a joyful atmosphere and lift people's spirits.

'Seeing' should be 'singing'. 'Left' is past tense; 'lift' is correct present tense. 'Bears' is incorrect; the correct word is 'spirits'.

× For example, when people sing together, it often brings a sense of unity and happiness. Make the environment more positive and enjoyable.

✓ For example, when people sing together, it often brings a sense of unity and happiness, making the environment more positive and enjoyable.

The second sentence is a fragment; it should be connected to the first sentence to form a complete sentence.