Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có ý nghĩa, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu hơi dài, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "it's can help". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn hơn và rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax after a stressful day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có sự mâu thuẫn khi bắt đầu nói "No" nhưng lại nói đã học hát. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp như "in my level". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, I have learned to sing by practicing with many songs on YouTube to improve my skills.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "want to think for", "I want I want her know", "express my grateful". Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và từ vựng phù hợp để truyền đạt ý tưởng.

例: I want to sing for my mother to show her how much I love and appreciate her.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và giải thích rõ ràng hơn về cách hát mang lại hạnh phúc.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps me and others feel relaxed and joyful.

× I really cherish singing because I think it is a simple way for me to express my emotions at this time and it's can help me to relax and relieve my stress.

✓ I really cherish singing because I think it is a simple way for me to express my emotions at this time and it can help me to relax and relieve my stress.

The phrase 'it's can help' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' and cannot be followed by 'can'. The correct form is 'it can help'. This is a third person singular issue where the auxiliary verb 'can' should directly follow the subject 'it' without 'is'.

× No, I have learned how to sing before.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing before.

The sentence contradicts itself by saying 'No' and then stating 'I have learned'. To express that the person has not learned, 'never' should be used. This is a past tense issue related to the correct use of negative adverbs with present perfect tense.

× I often shadow many songs in this YouTube so I can sing in my level.

✓ I often shadow many songs on YouTube so I can sing at my level.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'YouTube' and 'my level'. The correct prepositions are 'on YouTube' (platform) and 'at my level' (ability). This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× A special person I really want to think for is my mother because I want I want her know how much love that I spend that I give for her and I can express my grateful for her.

✓ A special person I really want to think of is my mother because I want her to know how much love I have for her and I can express my gratitude to her.

The phrase 'think for' should be 'think of'. Also, 'I want I want her know' is incorrect; it should be 'I want her to know'. 'Love that I spend that I give for her' is awkward; 'love I have for her' is better. 'Express my grateful for her' should be 'express my gratitude to her'. These are incorrect uses of pronouns and awkward phrasing.

× Actually singing can create happiness for people. Example it is me when I when I am cool me I singing and my seniors will will be relieved and I can.

✓ Actually, singing can create happiness for people. For example, when I am feeling calm and sing, my seniors feel relieved and I feel happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Example it is me when I when I am cool me I singing and my seniors will will be relieved and I can' is ungrammatical and confusing. The correction improves sentence structure and clarity.