Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, say "Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel relaxed and calm." Avoid redundancy and focus on clear expression.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel relaxed and calm after a stressful day.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, "Yes, I learned to sing at my school when I was a child, where we had singing classes. I practiced daily during those classes."

例: Yes, I learned to sing at my school when I was a child, where we had singing classes. I practiced daily during those classes.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words. For example, "I would like to sing for my family and close fans because they support me and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better."

例: I would like to sing for my family and close fans because they support me and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words. For example, "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and relieve stress. For instance, many feel better after singing their favourite songs."

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and relieve stress. For instance, many feel better after singing their favourite songs.

× Yes, I like singing when I I it's feel me a very stressless and a very cool minded persons that's why I like singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel very stress-free and calm, that's why I like singing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's feel me' which is grammatically wrong. The verb 'feel' should be in the base form after 'makes me'. Also, 'stressless' is not a correct adjective; 'stress-free' is appropriate. 'Cool minded persons' is incorrect; 'calm' or 'cool-minded person' would be better. The sentence structure is also confusing and needs simplification for clarity.

× Yes, I have learned to my school when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I learned at my school when I was a child.

The phrase 'have learned to my school' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'at' for location. Also, 'have learned' is present perfect tense which is less appropriate here than simple past 'learned' because the time is specified ('when I was a child').

× In my school there are singing classes.

✓ At my school, there were singing classes.

Since the speaker refers to the past ('when I was a child'), the verb 'are' should be in past tense 'were' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'at my school' is more appropriate than 'in my school' for location.

× I and I practice daily on my school basis on the singing classes.

✓ I practiced daily at school for the singing classes.

The phrase 'I and I' is incorrect and redundant. 'Practice' should be in past tense 'practiced' to match the past time frame. 'On my school basis' is incorrect; 'at school' is appropriate. 'On the singing classes' should be 'for the singing classes'.

× I would like to sing for my family and close fans singing for them feel specially because they are my sport tips and appreciate my effort which motivate me to perform better.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close fans because singing for them feels special; they are my support and appreciate my effort, which motivates me to perform better.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'singing for them feel specially' should be 'singing for them feels special' (subject-verb agreement and adjective use). 'Sport tips' is incorrect; it should be 'support'. 'Motivate' should be 'motivates' to agree with singular subject 'which'.

× Yes, I believe in believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people singing along to individual express their emotions and can be great way to leave stress.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. Singing along allows individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress.

The sentence has repetition 'believe in believe' which is incorrect. 'Singing along to individual express' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Singing along allows individuals to express'. 'Leave stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve stress'. Also, sentence structure needs to be improved for clarity.

× For example, many people feel uncomfortable and more positives after singing their favorite song either be a long.

✓ For example, many people feel more positive and comfortable after singing their favorite song, whether alone or along.

'More positives' is incorrect; 'more positive' is the correct adjective form. 'Feel uncomfortable and more positives' is contradictory; likely intended 'feel more positive and comfortable'. 'Either be a long' is incorrect; possibly meant 'either alone or along'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.