Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and relevant, but it is a bit long and repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me calm my emotions and relax. Moreover, singing in front of my family during gatherings has boosted my confidence.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct tense and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in school. I chose music as a subject, and our teacher, who was a professional singer, taught us many useful techniques.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear phrases and minor errors. Avoid using numbers like '1' in your speech. Also, try to provide more specific reasons and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I would love to sing for my loved ones because singing allows me to express my feelings and emotions. Therefore, I enjoy performing in front of my family and friends.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit formal and repetitive. Try to use simpler and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people express their true feelings. As a result, singing can make life more enjoyable.

× And I have always enjoyed singing in front of my family and my relatives in family gathering so it gave me a good confidence.

✓ And I have always enjoyed singing in front of my family and my relatives in family gatherings, so it gave me good confidence.

The phrase 'family gathering' should be plural 'family gatherings' because it refers to multiple occasions. Also, 'a good confidence' is incorrect; 'confidence' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'good confidence'.

× I chose the music as a subject and the teacher was just singer himself, so he gave us lectures about singing and I have learned so much from him.

✓ I chose music as a subject and the teacher was a singer himself, so he gave us lectures about singing and I learned so much from him.

The phrase 'the music' should be 'music' without 'the' because 'music' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'was just singer himself' is incorrect; it should be 'was a singer himself' to include the article 'a'. The phrase 'I have learned' should be 'I learned' to maintain past tense consistency with the rest of the sentence.

× I would love to sing for my loved ones because I think singing is a way to express the feelings and emotions of 1 so I would enjoy singing in front of my family and my friends.

✓ I would love to sing for my loved ones because I think singing is a way to express the feelings and emotions of oneself, so I would enjoy singing in front of my family and my friends.

The pronoun '1' is incorrect and likely a typo. It should be replaced with the reflexive pronoun 'oneself' to correctly refer back to a general person expressing feelings and emotions.