Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and correct pronunciation errors such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. Also, keep your answer concise and clear by focusing on key points without repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and have fun with my friends. Additionally, singing allows us to express our feelings and show care for each other.

提案: Avoid informal phrases like 'back in the olden days' and improve grammar such as 'I don't have many free time' to 'I didn't have much free time'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I was always busy with my studies and work. However, if I have more free time in the future, I would like to take singing lessons.

提案: Be careful with word choice; 'kill her by a song' is incorrect and confusing. Use appropriate expressions like 'dedicate a song' or 'sing a song for her'. Also, try to expand your answer with clear reasons.

例: I want to sing for my mum to express my love and appreciation. Singing a song is a heartfelt way to show how much she means to me.

提案: Correct pronunciation errors such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: Of course, I believe singing brings happiness because it is enjoyable and helps people connect emotionally. For example, singing together can create a sense of community and relaxation.

× I think seeing can share our love for each other and show how much we care about each other.

✓ I think singing can share our love for each other and show how much we care about each other.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the correct verb form is 'singing' to match the context of the conversation about singing. 'Seeing' is the present participle of 'see', which does not fit the intended meaning.

× so I don't have many free time to learn.

✓ so I don't have much free time to learn.

The phrase 'many free time' is incorrect because 'time' is an uncountable noun and should be used with 'much' instead of 'many'.

× But in the future if I have more free time, I want to take a sing lesson.

✓ But in the future if I have more free time, I want to take a singing lesson.

The noun form 'singing lesson' is correct here. 'Sing' is a verb, and 'singing' is the gerund form used as an adjective to describe the type of lesson.

× I want to express how I love her and kill her by a song and I want to share my appreciation for her.

✓ I want to express how much I love her and tell her by a song and I want to share my appreciation for her.

The phrase 'kill her by a song' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. The intended meaning is probably 'tell her by a song' or 'show her by a song'. 'Kill' is inappropriate here.

× I think seeing can bring happiness to people because it is quite fun and we can connect to each other deeply by seeing and everyone will feel so relaxed and happy.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because it is quite fun and we can connect to each other deeply by singing and everyone will feel so relaxed and happy.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'singing' to match the topic of singing bringing happiness.