Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，存在重复和语气词“UMM”影响流畅性。建议避免重复词汇，使用更准确的表达方式，并且减少语气词的使用，使回答更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel peaceful. When I listen to music, I like to follow the rhythm and sing along.

提案: 回答结构清晰，但语法有小错误，如“music classes outside is”应为“are”。建议注意主谓一致，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I haven't learned how to sing formally because I think my voice quality isn't good. Also, our school music classes don't teach singing techniques, and external classes are quite expensive.

提案: 表达不够准确，“Things for someone”不合适，且句子结构不完整。建议使用更准确的表达，避免语法错误，并丰富细节。

例: To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone because I feel very shy and nervous when performing in front of others.

提案: 回答中有重复和拼写错误（seeing应为 singing），句子结构混乱。建议避免重复，注意拼写，使用连贯的句子表达个人经历。

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness. For example, when I meet my friends, we often go to karaoke bars with a relaxing atmosphere, which helps us feel peaceful and happy.

× In addition, the music classes outside is quite expensive.

✓ In addition, the music classes outside are quite expensive.

这里的主语是复数形式的 "music classes"，谓语动词应使用复数形式 "are"，而不是单数形式 "is"。主谓一致错误。

× Things for someone makes me feel nervous.

✓ Things for someone make me feel nervous.

主语 "Things" 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式 "make"，而不是单数形式 "makes"。这是主谓一致错误，属于代词使用错误范畴。

× When I meet my friends, we often choose to go to a place to sing that's a relaxing atmosphere to make us peaceful and relax.

✓ When I meet my friends, we often choose to go to a place to sing that has a relaxing atmosphere to make us feel peaceful and relaxed.

原句中缺少动词 "has" 来连接 "a place" 和 "a relaxing atmosphere"，导致句子结构不完整。此外，"make us peaceful and relax" 语法不正确，应改为 "make us feel peaceful and relaxed"，使表达更自然。

× Yes, I enjoy singing. When I listen to music, I'd like to follow the tempo to sing UMM.

✓ Yes, I enjoy singing. When I listen to music, I'd like to follow the tempo to sing, umm.

"UMM" 应该作为语气词，用逗号隔开，且不应大写。虽然这不是严格的语法错误，但更符合口语表达习惯。

× Yes, definitely. I think seeing can bring happiness to people based on my Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people based on my personal experience.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think singing can bring happiness to people based on my personal experience.

原句中 "seeing" 应为 "singing"，且句子重复，应删除多余部分。这里是词汇使用错误，影响句意表达。