Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words and use proper sentence structure. For example, say "I like singing because it helps me express my feelings and emotions, especially when I miss someone."

例: I like singing because it helps me express my feelings and emotions, especially when I miss someone important to me.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has awkward phrasing. Use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar. Instead of "my voice is so rude type," say "my voice is not very good." Also, connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I have practiced singing sometimes, but I haven't improved much because my voice is not very good. However, sometimes I just sing randomly when lyrics come to my mind.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Be clear about who you want to sing for and why. Use proper pronouns and sentence structure. For example, "I want to sing for my loved ones because I miss them, especially when we don't talk."

例: I want to sing for my loved ones because I miss them, especially when we haven't talked for a long time.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to use linking words properly and avoid repeating phrases. For example, "Yes, singing can bring happiness, but sometimes songs express sadness or heartbreak, so they may not always make people happy."

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people, but sometimes songs express sadness or heartbreak, so they may not always make people happy.

× Yeah, I like singing because it's it's express my inner feelings, shows emotions and shows if I miss someone, if I miss something and especially if the persons who's singing is my favorite person.

✓ Yeah, I like singing because it expresses my inner feelings, shows emotions, and shows if I miss someone or something, especially if the person who's singing is my favorite.

The verb 'express' should be in third person singular form 'expresses' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'persons' should be singular 'person' to match the context. Repetition of 'it's' is incorrect and removed. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I practiced sometimes but I didn't make it because my voice is so rude type.

✓ I practiced sometimes but I didn't make it because my voice is a rude type.

The phrase 'so rude type' is incorrect; 'a rude type' is the correct form. The past tense 'practiced' and 'didn't make it' are correct. The correction focuses on article usage and adjective placement.

× But sometimes some lyrics come in my mind and I start singing randomly.

✓ But sometimes some lyrics come to my mind and I start singing randomly.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to thoughts or ideas entering the mind.

× For my loved 1 I loved ones and time.

✓ For my loved one, my loved ones, and time.

The phrase 'loved 1' should be 'loved one' to correctly refer to a single person. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I miss him just for not talking to him.

✓ I miss him just because I haven't talked to him.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Just for not talking to him' is incorrect; 'just because I haven't talked to him' correctly expresses the reason for missing him.

× That's why I think I just sing for him.

✓ That's why I think I just sing for him.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence related to the provided problem types.

× Yeah, definitely singing can bring happiness to people, but not every time 'cause there is a there is a lot of songs that express sadness, express anxiety, express broken hearts, sometimes break up songs that doesn't bring happiness to people.

✓ Yeah, definitely singing can bring happiness to people, but not every time because there are a lot of songs that express sadness, anxiety, broken hearts, and sometimes break-up songs that don't bring happiness to people.

The phrase 'there is a there is a lot of songs' is incorrect; it should be 'there are a lot of songs' because 'songs' is plural. Also, 'doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with plural 'songs'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.