Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, when I'm sad, I sing sad songs, and when I'm happy, I sing cheerful songs. Singing allows me to release my feelings effectively.

提案: Improve your sentence structure and clarity. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide a complete and clear answer with supporting details if possible.

例: Actually, I taught myself how to sing by practicing regularly at home. I didn't take formal lessons, but I learned by listening to songs and imitating the singers.

提案: Avoid repeating words and try to expand your answer with a reason or example to make it more engaging and natural.

例: I would like to sing for my loved ones, such as my family and friends, because singing for them makes me feel closer and brings us joy.

提案: Work on grammar accuracy and expand your answer with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, of course. I believe singing can make people happy, especially when they feel sad, because it helps them express their emotions and feel better.

× I love singing it's it's a type of way to let out your impression.

✓ I love singing; it's a way to let out your emotions.

The phrase 'a type of way' is redundant and awkward. Also, 'impression' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'emotions' to express feelings. Use a semicolon to separate two independent clauses properly.

× It's either.

✓ It's either one or the other.

The sentence 'It's either.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be completed to clarify the meaning, such as 'It's either one or the other.'

× If you're happy, you can sing as a happy song.

✓ If you're happy, you can sing a happy song.

The preposition 'as' is incorrectly used here. The correct phrase is 'sing a happy song' without 'as'.

× Actually, it's actually I learned self to sing.

✓ Actually, I taught myself to sing.

The phrase 'I learned self to sing' is incorrect. The correct reflexive pronoun is 'myself', and the verb 'taught' is appropriate for self-learning. Also, 'it's actually' is redundant and awkward here.

× I would like to sing for my loved ones my my family and friends.

✓ I would like to sing for my loved ones, my family, and friends.

The sentence has repeated words 'my my' and lacks commas to separate items in the list. Adding commas improves clarity.

× I think singing make makes people happy when they're sad.

✓ I think singing makes people happy when they're sad.

The verb should agree with the singular subject 'singing'. 'Makes' is the correct third person singular form, so 'make' is incorrect here.