Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言较为重复且不够自然。建议减少重复表达，使用更地道的表达方式，并且控制答案长度在5句以内。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood during my free time.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议注意时态和语法的正确使用，简洁明了地回答问题，并且补充具体细节。

例: No, I haven't received professional singing lessons, but in senior school, I joined a group where a music teacher taught us basic singing techniques.

提案: 回答内容较好，表达了原因和感受，但最后一句不完整。建议注意句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because their support encourages me. Sharing music with them creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够流畅。建议减少口语填充词，注意主谓一致，并用更具体的例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and feel energized, especially after a stressful day at work.

× No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professional, but in my senior school I was in school I took part in a crew with a music teacher to taught us basic thinking techniques.

✓ No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professionally, but in my senior school I took part in a crew with a music teacher who taught us basic singing techniques.

这里“professional”应使用副词形式“professionally”来修饰动词“sing”，表示“专业地唱歌”。另外，“to taught us”中“taught”是过去式，应改为“who taught us”引导定语从句，且“thinking techniques”应为“singing techniques”，符合语境。

× No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professional, but in my senior school I was in school I took part in a crew with a music teacher to taught us basic thinking techniques.

✓ No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professionally, but in my senior school I took part in a crew with a music teacher who taught us basic singing techniques.

“took part in a crew”中的“crew”用词不当，应该是“choir”（合唱团）更合适，且“in school I was in school”重复，应删去多余部分。

× No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professional, but in my senior school I was in school I took part in a crew with a music teacher to taught us basic thinking techniques.

✓ No, actually I haven't learned how to sing professionally, but in my senior school I took part in a choir with a music teacher who taught us basic singing techniques.

句子中“in my senior school I was in school”重复且结构混乱，应简化为“in my senior school”。

× Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful.

✓ Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

“a warm and joyful”后缺少名词，导致句子不完整，应补充名词“atmosphere”使句子完整。

× Sure, I think singing can bring happiness to people and can makes people relax umm and the song is very energetic can get someone umm out of the job.

✓ Sure, I think singing can bring happiness to people and can make people relax. Umm, the song is very energetic and can get someone out of their job.

“can makes”中“makes”应为原形“make”，因为情态动词后动词用原形。句子结构混乱，需分句并补充连词使表达清晰。