Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在多处拼写错误（如'seeing'应为'singing'），且表达不够自然，句子结构重复，缺乏连贯的连接词。建议注意单词拼写，简洁表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I like singing because it is a great way to express my emotions. For example, when I feel happy, I often sing songs to share my joy with others, which helps me connect with them.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，表达不清晰且逻辑混乱。建议明确表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的词汇和句式。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing because I believe singing is a natural talent that people are born with, so I don't think formal lessons would improve my singing skills.

提案: 回答表达了情感，但句子结构重复，部分表达不够准确。建议使用多样的句型，避免重复，并更准确地表达感情。

例: I'd like to sing a song for my mother to thank her for her unconditional love. Her support means a lot to me, and singing is my way to show my appreciation.

提案: 回答中有重复和拼写错误，句子冗长且缺乏逻辑连接。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows us to share our emotions with others. Music is a universal language that connects people and spreads joy.

× I like singing because I think seeing is a good way to express our feelings to the the other things.

✓ I like singing because I think singing is a good way to express our feelings to other people.

这里'seeing'是拼写错误，应该是'singing'，因为上下文讲的是唱歌。'the the other things'重复且用词不当，应该用'other people'来表达“其他人”。

× For example, I always sing the songs when I was happy and I think it is a way to express my feelings to others and others will be impressed by my feeling too.

✓ For example, I always sing songs when I am happy, and I think it is a way to express my feelings to others, and others will be impressed by my feelings too.

这里时态不一致，'when I was happy'应改为现在时'when I am happy'，因为表达的是习惯性动作。'the songs'中'the'不必要，改为'songs'更自然。'feeling'应为复数'feelings'，因为表达多种感情。

× No, I haven't learned how to sing because I think singing is just the inability that people born with.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing because I think singing is just an ability that people are born with.

'inability'意思是“无能”，与句意相反，应改为'ability'。'people born with'缺少被动结构，应改为'people are born with'。

× So I don't think learning to sing can help us improve our our skills on seeing well.

✓ So I don't think learning to sing can help us improve our singing skills.

'our our'重复，应删去一个。'skills on seeing well'用词错误，应该是'singing skills'，表示“唱歌技能”。

× I'd like to sing a song about her love to her because I feel her deep love and I want to do something to return to it.

✓ I'd like to sing a song about her love for me because I feel her deep love and I want to do something to return it.

'her love to her'表达不正确，应该是'her love for me'，表示“她对我的爱”。'return to it'中'to'多余，应改为'return it'。

× I do think seeing can bring happiness to people because if I do think singing can bring happiness to people because when we sing a song, we will share our emotions to others and others will be impressed by us in the way of music and music is a universal language that can make us share our feelings.

✓ I do think singing can bring happiness to people because when we sing a song, we share our emotions with others, and others will be impressed by us through music. Music is a universal language that allows us to share our feelings.

句中'seeing'应为'singing'。'if I do think'重复且不合逻辑，应删去。'share our emotions to others'介词用错，应为'share our emotions with others'。'in the way of music'表达不自然，改为'through music'更合适。句子过长，适当断句使表达更清晰。