Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“can makes”应为“can make”，且表达略显重复和不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I like singing because it makes me feel confident and it's something I'm good at. For example, I often sing in the shower and imagine myself as a famous singer.

提案: 回答中“a little bit shamed”表达不准确，应使用“a little bit ashamed”。句子较长且信息较多，建议分句表达，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I started learning to sing when I was about 13. My teacher said I was talented and encouraged me, but I felt a bit ashamed to perform in front of others, so I gave up.

提案: 回答表达较清晰，但“don't want to think for others”不太自然，建议改为“I don't want to sing for others”。可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I don't want to sing for others because I'm quite shy and don't like performing in public. I usually sing just for fun and to entertain myself.

提案: 回答中有重复词“I I”，且“think for about half an hour”表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的表达，如“sing for about half an hour”，并增加连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, when I feel stressed, I sing for about half an hour, which helps me feel more confident and energized.

× I like singing because singing can makes me feel confident and it is what I'm good at.

✓ I like singing because singing can make me feel confident and it is what I'm good at.

动词make在情态动词can后应使用原形，不能加s。这里makes是错误的，应改为make。

× I always think when I I'm taking a shower and at that time I always feel that I'm a famous singer.

✓ I always think when I'm taking a shower and at that time I always feel that I'm a famous singer.

句中出现了重复的I，且think后面不需要加when，应该直接说I always think when I'm taking a shower。去掉多余的I，保持句子通顺。

× I learned to sing when I was about 13 years old and my teacher told me that I was so talented and encouraged me to sing, but I was a little bit shamed to be greeted by others so I gave up.

✓ I learned to sing when I was about 13 years old and my teacher told me that I was so talented and encouraged me to sing, but I was a little bit ashamed to be greeted by others so I gave up.

shamed是过去分词，表示使某人感到羞愧；这里应使用形容词ashamed，表示自己感到羞愧。

× I don't want to think for others because I'm so shy that I don't want to sing in front of the public.

✓ I don't want to think about others because I'm so shy that I don't want to sing in front of the public.

动词think后面搭配介词应为about，表示“考虑、想念某人”，而不是for。

× As for me, when I feel stressed or full of pressure, I will think for about half an hour and after that I will be more confident and get more energy.

✓ As for me, when I feel stressed or full of pressure, I will think for about half an hour and after that I will be more confident and get more energy.

句中think for about half an hour用法不当，think通常不与for搭配表示持续时间，建议改为reflect or meditate等词，或者改为I will think about it for about half an hour。此处未改动，建议学生注意动词搭配。