Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子结构不够自然，有些语法错误和重复。建议简化句子，避免冗余，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax, especially when I feel happy or sad. For example, I often sing in the morning or while taking a shower, which makes me feel joyful and refreshed.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，句子不够连贯。建议直接回答问题，使用连接词，并提供具体细节使内容更丰富。

例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was a student at school. We had music classes where the teacher taught us singing skills and new songs. I really enjoyed these classes and liked my music teacher very much.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的地方，尤其是最后一句。建议简洁明了地表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I like to sing for my two young daughters. My older daughter, who is two years old, also loves singing. We often sing together, which is a relaxing and enjoyable time for all of us.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For example, when people sing together outdoors, it helps them connect with each other and express their emotions more easily.

× Yes, I like singing songs is kind of a relaxing way for me, especially when I feel happy or when I feel sad.

✓ Yes, I like singing songs because it is a kind of relaxing way for me, especially when I feel happy or sad.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunction and verb structure, causing confusion. Adding 'because it is' clarifies the relationship between liking singing and it being relaxing.

× Singing a song can help me to express my emotion.

✓ Singing songs can help me to express my emotions.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to refer to various feelings. Also, 'singing songs' is more natural than 'singing a song' in this context.

× I sing the songs most of the time during the morning or when I take a shower.

✓ I sing songs most of the time in the morning or when I take a shower.

The preposition 'during' is incorrect with 'the morning'; 'in the morning' is the correct phrase.

× That's really funny, I enjoy the time when I sing.

✓ That's really fun; I enjoy the time when I sing.

'Funny' means causing laughter, but here 'fun' is appropriate to express enjoyment. Also, the sentence should be separated properly with a semicolon or period.

× Yes, I I learned, I learnt when I was a student during the school.

✓ Yes, I learned when I was a student at school.

Repeated 'I' is an error. 'During the school' is incorrect; 'at school' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'learned' or 'learnt' is acceptable, but only one is needed.

× We have a music school, a class, the teacher will basically teach us the skills to sing the songs and teach us for the new songs.

✓ We had a music class where the teacher basically taught us skills to sing songs and introduced new songs.

'Have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'was a student'. 'Teach us for the new songs' is incorrect; 'introduced new songs' is clearer. Also, 'music school, a class' is confusing; 'music class' is better.

× And I really enjoy the music class and I love my music teacher very much.

✓ And I really enjoyed the music class and loved my music teacher very much.

Since the context is past (when the student was a student), past tense 'enjoyed' and 'loved' should be used.

× I like to sing for my children.

✓ I like to sing for my children.

No correction needed; sentence is correct.

× I have two lovely daughters, they're very small.

✓ I have two lovely daughters; they're very young.

'Small' is less appropriate for age; 'young' is better to describe children.

× My old one, she is 2 years old, she loves to sing as well.

✓ My older one, she is 2 years old, and she loves to sing as well.

'Old one' should be 'older one' to compare between two children. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.

× We both sing the songs together and this is quite relaxing and enjoyable time for all of us.

✓ We both sing songs together, and this is quite a relaxing and enjoyable time for all of us.

'The songs' is too specific; 'songs' is better. Also, 'a relaxing and enjoyable time' needs the article 'a'.

× And I'm a small one also like me to see.

✓ And my younger one also likes to sing like me.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Corrected sentence clarifies meaning with proper structure and verb agreement.

× There are so many happy shows that can express their happiness to people.

✓ There are so many happy songs that can express happiness to people.

'Shows' is likely a mistake for 'songs' in this context. Also, 'their happiness' is vague; 'happiness' is better.

× And especially when people go outside together, we start to we start to sing together that really help us make more connection for each other and help us to express our emotions.

✓ Especially when people go outside together, we start to sing together, which really helps us make more connections with each other and helps us express our emotions.

The original sentence has repetition ('we start to we start to'), missing commas, and incorrect verb agreement ('help' should be 'helps'). Also, 'make more connection for each other' should be 'make more connections with each other'.