Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit short and could be more natural by adding a reason with linking words. Try to avoid repeating similar ideas and use more varied vocabulary.

例: No, I don't enjoy singing because I feel that my voice isn't very good. Therefore, I usually avoid singing in public.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and try to use more precise vocabulary.

例: No, I have never learned to sing formally. I believe it is quite challenging because one must pay attention to pitch and tone, which requires practice.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to organise your ideas and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I would like to sing for my family during small gatherings, such as birthdays, to make the occasion more special for my loved ones.

提案: Your answer conveys the idea but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words and more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts clearly.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it connects with our emotions. Many songs reflect different moods, such as happiness or sadness, which helps people feel understood.

× No, I never learned how to sing.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing.

The sentence refers to an experience up to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have never learned' is appropriate instead of simple past 'never learned'. This tense indicates that the action has relevance to the present moment.

× So not an easy but I never tried before.

✓ So it is not easy, and I have never tried before.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper conjunction. Adding 'it is' clarifies the subject, and 'and' connects the two ideas properly. Also, 'have never tried' is better to express experience up to now.

× like someone birthday in my family

✓ like someone's birthday in my family

The possessive form 'someone's' is needed to indicate that the birthday belongs to someone. Without the apostrophe and 's', the phrase is incorrect.

× so that that time I want really want to sing for my special one.

✓ so at that time, I really want to sing for my special one.

The phrase 'so that that time' is awkward and redundant. Replacing it with 'so at that time' improves clarity. Also, removing the repeated 'want' corrects the sentence structure.

× singing provides happiness because it's attached with our emotion

✓ singing provides happiness because it's connected with our emotions

The verb 'attached' is not correctly used with 'with' here. 'Connected with' or 'associated with' is more appropriate. Also, 'emotions' should be plural to refer generally.

× so many songs are related with our situation when we happy, sad and so many situations.

✓ so many songs are related to our situations when we are happy, sad, and in many other situations.

The correct preposition is 'related to' not 'related with'. Also, 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to match 'so many'. The verb 'are' is needed after 'we' for correct grammar.

× So singing provide us happiness.

✓ So singing provides us happiness.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.