Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Also, organize your ideas logically and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me happy. Although I am not very talented and sometimes sing out of tune, I enjoy performing. Moreover, many Filipinos are known for their good singing skills, which inspires me to keep practicing.

提案: Improve your answer by providing clearer details and using correct terms. Also, avoid vague expressions and explain briefly what you learned.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in high school during our music lessons. We studied basic singing techniques and musical notes, but I realized that singing is not my strongest skill.

提案: Make your answer more concise and coherent by linking your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating information and use appropriate tenses.

例: Besides my parents, I want to sing for my boyfriend because he is very special to me. Since he loves music, I would like to sing his favorite song for him, even if I am not perfectly in tune.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid confusing pronouns. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, definitely. I believe singing can bring happiness because when a person sings from the heart, they express their emotions and share their feelings with others.

× Yes, I like singing but I think singing don't like me because I have no talent in singing but I love I love to sing, I love to perform even though I know that I am not that tuned enough for singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing but I think singing doesn't like me because I have no talent in singing but I love to sing, I love to perform even though I know that I am not that tuned enough for singing.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' instead of 'don't' to agree in number. In English, singular third-person subjects take verbs with 'does' or 'doesn't' in negative form.

× But Filipinos known for good singing skills so.

✓ But Filipinos are known for good singing skills, so.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' to form the passive voice. Also, a comma before 'so' improves clarity. The definite article is not needed here, but the verb is essential for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, I've learned how to sing back when I was in high school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing back when I was in high school.

The phrase 'back when I was in high school' refers to a specific past time, so simple past tense 'learned' is more appropriate than present perfect 'have learned' which is used for unspecified past time or recent events.

× We have a music lesson and I've learned about keystones, but definitely singing is not for me.

✓ We had a music lesson and I learned about keystones, but definitely singing is not for me.

Since the event happened in the past (high school), past tense 'had' and 'learned' should be used. Also, 'a music lesson' is correct here as it refers to one lesson. The original sentence mixes tenses which causes confusion.

× Aside from my family for my parents, I wanted to sing for my boyfriend.

✓ Aside from my family, especially my parents, I want to sing for my boyfriend.

The phrase 'for my parents' is better expressed as 'especially my parents' to clarify meaning. Also, 'wanted' should be 'want' to match the present tense context of the question.

× I have a boyfriend and he's so special to me. He loves listening to music so I wanted to sing a song for him, especially his favorite song even though I'm out of tune.

✓ I have a boyfriend and he's so special to me. He loves listening to music so I want to sing a song for him, especially his favorite song even though I'm out of tune.

The desire to sing is current, so present tense 'want' is appropriate instead of past tense 'wanted'. This maintains consistency with the present context.

× Yes, definitely. Singing is a talent and I believe that if one person sings, he sings with her, with her heart and shows to people what's inside her and how to express her emotions.

✓ Yes, definitely. Singing is a talent and I believe that if one person sings, they sing with their heart and show people what's inside them and how to express their emotions.

Using 'he' and 'her' inconsistently for the same subject is incorrect. Using the singular 'they' and corresponding plural pronouns 'their' and 'them' is more inclusive and grammatically correct in this context.