Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not good. When I sing, I feel uncomfortable and lack confidence.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về việc học hát.

例: Yes, I learned singing at school during music lessons to improve my skills. However, I don't think I am very good at it, and sometimes I worry that my teacher is disappointed with my voice.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc rõ ràng để diễn đạt ý tưởng của mình.

例: I want to sing for my mom to show my appreciation. Singing for her would make her happy and help us feel closer.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là chia động từ. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp các ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Definitely yes. Singing can help people connect with others and boost their confidence. It also improves mood when someone feels sad and reduces stress from work or study.

× I am not into singing because I think I am not good at singing.

✓ I am not into singing because I think I am not good at singing.

No correction needed for this sentence as the use of 'singing' as a gerund is correct here.

× When I sing, I feel very bad because of my voice and I it is not reliable to me.

✓ When I sing, I feel very bad because of my voice and it is not reliable to me.

The phrase 'and I it is not reliable to me' contains an unnecessary pronoun 'I'. Removing 'I' corrects the sentence structure.

× I have learned how to sing at school during my music lessons because we need to learn about music to be develop our skills in the future.

✓ I have learned how to sing at school during my music lessons because we need to learn about music to develop our skills in the future.

The phrase 'to be develop' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to develop' as an infinitive verb. 'To be develop' mixes infinitive and passive forms incorrectly.

× But I think I am not good at music.

✓ But I think I am not good at music.

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I am so make my teacher disappointed about my voice.

✓ I have made my teacher disappointed because of my voice.

The original sentence has incorrect verb usage and structure. 'I am so make' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I have made' to indicate a past action affecting the present. Also, 'disappointed about' is better expressed as 'disappointed because of'.

× I want to sing for my mom because I want to give her some.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because I want to give her something.

The word 'some' is incomplete here; it should be 'something' to indicate an unspecified object or feeling.

× I want to illustrate my appreciation to her and that light a way to give person.

✓ I want to show my appreciation to her and that is a way to give to a person.

The phrase 'illustrate my appreciation' is awkward; 'show my appreciation' is more natural. 'That light a way to give person' is ungrammatical; it should be 'that is a way to give to a person'.

× It is sweet and make my mom happier that we can connect together.

✓ It is sweet and makes my mom happier because we can connect together.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'that' should be replaced with 'because' to clarify the cause-effect relationship.

× Definitely yes, singing can help people to be connected and boost their confidence, they can be improve their mood when they are sad, that everyone can happier and they can reduce stresses from their studying and working.

✓ Definitely yes, singing can help people to be connected and boost their confidence; they can improve their mood when they are sad, so everyone can be happier and reduce stress from their studying and working.

The phrase 'they can be improve' is incorrect; it should be 'they can improve'. 'That everyone can happier' is incorrect; it should be 'so everyone can be happier'. 'Reduce stresses' should be 'reduce stress' as 'stress' is usually uncountable in this context.