Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、内容が少し冗長で、文の構造がやや不明瞭です。トピックセンテンスを明確にし、具体的な理由や経験を簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。例えば、"I like singing because it makes me happy and I have enjoyed it since elementary school."のようにまとめることができます。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and confident. I started singing in elementary school, and since then, I have enjoyed practicing and improving my voice.

提案: 回答は内容が豊富ですが、文法や語彙の使い方に改善の余地があります。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。また、"different kinds of music"や"different types of music"のような重複表現は避け、具体的な例を挙げると良いです。

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing through music lessons in elementary, junior high, and the first year of high school. We sang various songs from different countries, which made the experience very interesting and enjoyable for me.

提案: 回答は正直で自然ですが、文法の誤りや言葉の選び方に注意が必要です。例えば、"I don't want to sing in front of a large audience because I get nervous."のように簡潔に表現しましょう。また、理由と希望を明確に分けて話すと良いです。

例: I usually feel nervous singing in front of many people because my voice shakes. Therefore, I prefer singing at karaoke with my friends, where I can enjoy music comfortably.

提案: 回答は感情がよく伝わり、内容も具体的ですが、いくつかの表現をより自然にするとさらに良くなります。例えば、"Singing can bring people together and make them happy because it allows them to express emotions and connect with others."のように言い換えられます。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it can brighten people's days and help them connect with others, even strangers. For example, I have seen videos where people bond through singing together.

× The first time I started singing was great too during elementary school and then from there I started.

✓ The first time I started singing was great too during elementary school, and then from there I continued.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'I started' which is incomplete. The verb 'started' should be followed by an object or a continuation. Here, 'continued' better expresses the ongoing action after the initial start.

× we had music lessons and then we sing different kinds of musics or like different types of music from different countries.

✓ we had music lessons and then we sang different kinds of music or different types of music from different countries.

The word 'musics' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Also, the verb tense should be past tense 'sang' to match the past time frame.

× we had music lessons and then we sing different kinds of musics or like different types of music from different countries.

✓ we had music lessons and then we sang different kinds of music or different types of music from different countries.

The verb 'sing' should be in the past tense 'sang' to agree with the past time frame indicated by 'had music lessons'.

× I don't wanna sing in a various like audience staring at me.

✓ I don't wanna sing in front of a large audience staring at me.

The phrase 'a various like audience' is incorrect. 'Various' is used with plural countable nouns without 'a'. Here, 'a large audience' or 'a crowd' is appropriate. Also, 'in front of' is the correct preposition for performing before an audience.

× I don't wanna sing in a various like audience staring at me.

✓ I don't wanna sing in front of a large audience staring at me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to performing before an audience. The correct preposition is 'in front of' to indicate facing the audience.

× I see videos that strangers bond through singing musics.

✓ I see videos where strangers bond through singing music.

'Musics' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Also, 'that' should be replaced with 'where' to refer to the place or context of bonding.