Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，避免重复，并注意时态和单复数的正确使用。可以多用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: No, I don't like singing because I often sing out of tune, which makes me feel embarrassed. However, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially those with beautiful voices.

提案: 回答偏离主题，未直接回答是否学过唱歌，且句子不够连贯。建议直接回答问题，并用简洁的句子说明相关经历。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing. But I did learn painting when I was in elementary school, which was a wonderful experience.

提案: 表达中有语法错误和用词不当，如“important person”应为“important people”，句子不够流畅。建议注意主谓一致和时态，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: If I had to choose, I would definitely sing for my parents because they are very important to me. They always support me when I face difficulties, so I feel very lucky to have them.

提案: 表达不够准确，词汇使用不当，如“a downside”应为“down”或“low mood”，句子结构重复。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness. When people feel sad or depressed, listening to songs can encourage them and help them feel better.

× No, actually I don't as I usually out of tone, out of tune which makes me pretty embarrassed but I prefer but I like to listen others singing which especially those who has beautiful song, a beautiful voice.

✓ No, actually I don't because I am usually out of tone, out of tune, which makes me pretty embarrassed, but I prefer to listen to others singing, especially those who have beautiful songs and beautiful voices.

句中“others singing”缺少介词“to”，应为“listen to others singing”；“those who has”主语是复数，谓语动词应为“have”；“song”应为复数“songs”；“a beautiful voice”前缺少连词，应与前面并列。

× No actually I didn't learn before but I I have learned painting in when I was in elementary school.

✓ No, actually I didn't learn before, but I learned painting when I was in elementary school.

句中“have learned”与前文“didn't learn before”时态不一致，应统一使用过去时“learned”；“in when”多余，应去掉“in”。

× It was quite amazing time and I feel I learned a lot from it, especially how to paint the sketch sketch like black and white.

✓ It was quite an amazing time and I feel I learned a lot from it, especially how to paint sketches like black and white.

“amazing time”前缺少冠词“an”；“sketch sketch”重复，应为复数“sketches”；“like black and white”表达不清，应为“like black and white sketches”。

× If I had to choose, I'd definitely sing for my parents because they are important person for me in my life.

✓ If I had to choose, I'd definitely sing for my parents because they are important people to me in my life.

“important person”应为复数“important people”，因为指的是“parents”；“for me”应改为“to me”更符合习惯用法。

× When I have made, when I have difficulties, they always be by my side and support me.

✓ When I have difficulties, they are always by my side and support me.

“When I have made”不完整且无意义，应删除；“they always be”时态错误，应为“they are always”；“have difficulties”正确，保持现在时。

× I'm so lucky to have them so I definitely seem.

✓ I'm so lucky to have them, so I definitely sing.

“seem”用词错误，应为“sing”符合语境；句中缺少逗号分隔。

× Some of song can encourage them to walk away from, you know, from the deep, from the downside in their lives.

✓ Some songs can encourage them to walk away from, you know, the deep, from the downside in their lives.

“Some of song”应为复数“Some songs”；“walk away from”后不需要重复“from”；“the deep”表达不清，保留原意。