Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid filler words like 'Umm' and keep your sentences concise. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'so'.

例: No, I don't really enjoy singing because I am not confident in my vocal skills. Instead, I prefer listening to music and expressing myself through other forms of art, such as painting, which makes me feel more comfortable.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and informative. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words like 'however' or 'although' to contrast ideas smoothly.

例: No, I have never learned to sing. However, I have explored other artistic disciplines such as painting and dancing, which I enjoy because they allow me to express myself creatively and develop different skills.

提案: Good answer with clear reasons and linking words. To improve, avoid vague phrases like 'somehow' and try to be more precise. Also, keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts. Sharing music with them creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and contains some grammatical errors. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'however' correctly, and complete your thoughts fully.

例: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people by helping them release stress and express their emotions. For example, singing in front of my family and close friends always lifts my mood and creates a joyful atmosphere.

× Absolutely, I believed singing can bring a lot of happiness to people and help them release stress and express their emotions.

✓ Absolutely, I believe singing can bring a lot of happiness to people and help them release stress and express their emotions.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'believed' when the present tense 'believe' is appropriate to express a current opinion or general truth. Using the present tense maintains consistency and clarity in expressing ongoing beliefs.

× For example, I enjoy singing in front of my family and close friends, which gives me which always lifts my mood and creates A joyful atmosphere.

✓ For example, I enjoy singing in front of my family and close friends, which always lifts my mood and creates a joyful atmosphere.

The sentence contains redundant and misplaced words 'which gives me which' causing confusion and grammatical error. Removing the redundant phrase and correcting the capitalization of 'A' to 'a' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.