Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Try to start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions when I'm feeling sad. For example, singing calms me down and makes me feel happier.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a complete response with clear reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid unfinished sentences.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing yet. However, if I have enough money in the future, I would love to take singing lessons because I dreamed of becoming a singer when I was a child.

提案: Your answer is personal but could be more structured and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid informal words like 'wanna'.

例: I want to sing a heartfelt song for my ex-boyfriend because our recent breakup was difficult. By singing, I hope to express my feelings and make him realize what he has lost.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better linking words. Also, correct small grammar mistakes for clarity.

例: Yes, definitely. Singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings freely. Therefore, it helps improve their mood and overall well-being.

× Yes I like singing because when I'm sad it helps me to flow my emotion into it and it helps me to calm down and my heart console.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I'm sad it helps me to flow my emotions into it and it helps me to calm down and console my heart.

The verb 'flow' should be in the '-ing' form 'flowing' or better replaced with 'express' to correctly describe the action of releasing emotions. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. 'My heart console' is incorrect; it should be 'console my heart' to maintain correct verb-object order.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing, but if I own a lot of money in my in future, I'll definitely love to learn it because when I was a child, I used to say that I would be a singer like this person or that person.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing, but if I own a lot of money in the future, I'll definitely love to learn it because when I was a child, I used to say that I would be a singer like this person or that person.

The phrase 'in my in future' is incorrect; it should be 'in the future'. This is a prepositional error corrected here. The rest of the sentence is correct in tense usage.

× Recently my boyfriend broke up with me and it felt so hard for me so I wanna sing a heartfelt song in front of him and make him realize what he have lost in his life.

✓ Recently, my boyfriend broke up with me and it felt so hard for me, so I want to sing a heartfelt song in front of him and make him realize what he has lost in his life.

The pronoun 'he have' is incorrect; it should be 'he has' to agree with the third person singular subject. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.

× Yes, definitely. Singing can bring happiness to people because it helps to express your feelings in front of all you. You don't have to think twice to express your feeling, so it makes people happier.

✓ Yes, definitely. Singing can bring happiness to people because it helps to express your feelings in front of everyone. You don't have to think twice to express your feelings, so it makes people happier.

The phrase 'in front of all you' is incorrect; it should be 'in front of everyone' to correctly refer to people. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context.