Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and awkward phrasing. Also, use clearer expressions and correct grammar to improve fluency. For example, instead of "everyone around me will start from running," say "everyone around me would run away."

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, but I often avoid it because I think my voice isn't very good and people might not like it.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details to make it more coherent and engaging. Also, use contractions naturally to sound more fluent.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally, but if I ever get the chance, I would definitely love to take lessons because I really enjoy singing and listening to music.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with grammar, such as avoiding double 'would'.

例: If I had the chance to sing, I would like to perform a romantic song for my spouse to express my feelings towards him.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer expressions. Also, avoid awkward phrasing like "Singing and being a joy among people." Try to explain your ideas more specifically.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because when people feel sad or stressed, listening to their favourite music helps them relax and forget their worries.

× I like singing but I feel like my voice is not that great so I just kind of avoid it because I think if I start singing everyone around me will start from running.

✓ I like singing but I feel like my voice is not that great so I just kind of avoid it because I think if I start singing everyone around me will start running.

The phrase 'start from running' is incorrect. The verb 'start' should be followed directly by the '-ing' form of the verb without 'from'. The correct form is 'start running'. This is a common error with verb + -ing forms.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing, but if I ever get a chance I would definitely love to do it because I love singing and listening to music.

✓ No, I haven't learnt how to sing, but if I ever get a chance I would definitely love to do it because I love singing and listening to music.

In Australian English, the past tense of 'learn' is commonly spelled 'learnt' rather than 'learned'. Using 'learnt' aligns with Australian English conventions.

× If I ever get a chance to sing a song, I would definitely would like to sing it for my spouse because I want to express my feelings towards him so through through a romantic song.

✓ If I ever get a chance to sing a song, I would definitely like to sing it for my spouse because I want to express my feelings towards him through a romantic song.

The phrase 'would definitely would like' contains a redundant modal verb 'would'. Only one 'would' is needed. Also, the repeated word 'through' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'through'. Modal verbs should be used correctly to avoid redundancy.

× Yes, I think so. Singing and being a joy among people because whenever they feel sad or have stress, they can just listen to their favorite music which can help them to relax and forget about the stress and weariness.

✓ Yes, I think so. Singing brings joy to people because whenever they feel sad or stressed, they can just listen to their favourite music which can help them to relax and forget about the stress and weariness.

The phrase 'Singing and being a joy among people' is incorrect. The verb 'being' is not appropriate here; instead, 'Singing brings joy to people' is correct. Also, 'have stress' is better expressed as 'feel stressed'. Additionally, 'favorite' should be spelled 'favourite' in Australian English. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.