Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural English expressions and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'I very like singing', say 'I really like singing'. Also, keep your answer concise and clear by combining ideas logically.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood when I'm feeling sad.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and sentence structures. For example, say 'I tried to attend singing classes when I was a child, but I didn't enjoy them because I didn't feel comfortable.' Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' to sound more confident.

例: Yes, I tried attending singing classes when I was a child, but I didn't enjoy them because I didn't feel comfortable in the class.

提案: Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words. Instead of 'funny activity activity', say 'fun activity'. Also, try to combine sentences for clarity and flow.

例: I enjoy singing for my family and friends because it's a fun activity that brings us closer together.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. For example, say 'Yes, singing can bring happiness because listening to music or singing helps people feel better when they are sad.' Avoid fragmented sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because listening to music or singing helps lift their spirits when they feel sad.

× Yes, I very like singing and because when I sing a song or anything I feel relaxed and when I'm sad I try to sing a song.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because when I sing a song or anything, I feel relaxed, and when I'm sad, I try to sing a song.

The phrase 'I very like' is incorrect; 'very' is not used with 'like' in this way. Instead, 'really like' is appropriate to express strong liking. Also, the conjunction 'and because' is redundant; 'because' alone suffices. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Uh, yes, when I was child I try to go to class for singing but I didn't like the class and when I was in the class I feel not good.

✓ Uh, yes, when I was a child, I tried to go to a singing class, but I didn't like the class, and when I was in the class, I didn't feel good.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Try' and 'feel' should be in past tense 'tried' and 'didn't feel' to match 'was'. Also, 'a child' requires the article 'a'. 'Class for singing' is better expressed as 'a singing class'. Commas improve readability.

× I really enjoy to sing for my family because I think it's a funny activity activity.

✓ I really enjoy singing for my family because I think it's a fun activity.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund ('singing'), not an infinitive ('to sing'). Also, 'funny' means causing laughter, but 'fun' is the correct adjective to describe an enjoyable activity. The repeated word 'activity' is removed.

× That's why I enjoy to sing a song for my family and my friends.

✓ That's why I enjoy singing songs for my family and my friends.

Again, 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('singing'), not an infinitive ('to sing'). Also, 'a song' can be pluralized to 'songs' to sound more natural in this context.

× Yes, singing. It's can be happiness to people because I think listen to music or singing, it's a good idea for sad people, it can make happy people.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because I think listening to music or singing is a good idea for sad people; it can make people happy.

The original sentence has fragmented and incorrect structure. 'It's can be' is incorrect; 'can bring' is better. 'Listen to music or singing' should be 'listening to music or singing' to maintain parallel gerund forms. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.