Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating words like 'these these' and complete your sentences fully. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, 'Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and gives me pleasure, especially when I sing with my friends or daughters.'

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and gives me pleasure, especially when I sing with my friends or daughters. It is a really enjoyable activity that I always look forward to.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by structuring it better and using linking words. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'never used to learn'. Instead, say 'I have never taken formal singing lessons'.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but some of my friends have complimented my voice when I sing in our group, which makes me feel confident.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid hesitation phrases like 'it's really a tough question'.

例: I have never really thought about it, but I would like to sing for people who are close to me, such as my family members and good friends, because I feel comfortable with them.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and contains filler words like 'you know'. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, 'Yes, I definitely believe that singing brings happiness to people. It is an activity that can lighten up faces and is often enjoyed at gatherings or parties.'

例: Yes, I definitely believe that singing brings happiness to people. It is an activity that can lighten up faces and is often enjoyed at gatherings or parties, making the atmosphere lively and joyful.

× Yes, I like singing because it helps me on these these stressed out and also it gives me pleasure to sing with friends and sometimes with my daughters.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps me when I am stressed out and also it gives me pleasure to sing with friends and sometimes with my daughters.

The phrase 'helps me on these these stressed out' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use with 'helps me' in this context is 'when' to indicate the time or condition. Also, 'these these' is a repetition error. The corrected sentence uses 'when I am stressed out' to properly express the idea.

× No I haven't learned singing but yes I have a good voice because some of my friends complimented me when I sing in friends group so I never used to learn singing.

✓ No, I haven't learned singing but yes, I have a good voice because some of my friends complimented me when I sang in a friends group so I never used to learn singing.

The verb 'sing' should be in the past tense 'sang' to agree with the past action 'complimented'. Also, 'friends group' should be preceded by an article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× No I haven't learned singing but yes I have a good voice because some of my friends complimented me when I sing in friends group so I never used to learn singing.

✓ No, I haven't learned singing but yes, I have a good voice because some of my friends complimented me when I sang in a friends group so I never used to learn singing.

The verb 'sing' is incorrectly in present tense when referring to a past event. It should be in past tense 'sang' to maintain tense consistency.

× Well, it's really a tough question because I have not think about it ever.

✓ Well, it's really a tough question because I have not thought about it ever.

The verb 'think' should be in past participle form 'thought' after 'have not' to form the present perfect tense correctly.

× But yes, I always want to sing with someone who is very friendly to me and I am very familiar to them like my family members and some of my friends.

✓ But yes, I always want to sing with someone who is very friendly to me and whom I am very familiar with, like my family members and some of my friends.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect here; 'whom' is the correct relative pronoun as the object of the preposition 'with'. Also, 'familiar to' should be 'familiar with'.

× Yes, I definitely believe that the singing gives happiness to people and singing is that kind of activity which brings happiness to people's face.

✓ Yes, I definitely believe that singing gives happiness to people and singing is that kind of activity which brings happiness to people's faces.

The phrase 'brings happiness to people's face' is incorrect; it should be 'faces' in plural to match 'people'. Also, 'the singing' is unnecessary; 'singing' as a general activity does not need 'the'.

× So in a gathering or in a party, singing is much, you know, likely activity which people enjoy and.

✓ So in a gathering or at a party, singing is a very likely activity which people enjoy.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect before 'a party'; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'much, you know, likely activity' is awkward; 'a very likely activity' is clearer and grammatically correct. The sentence was incomplete, so it was completed for clarity.