Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构有些混乱，建议简化句子并注意时态和搭配的正确使用。例如，“I have joined a singing club since I was in primary school”应改为“I have been a member of a singing club since primary school”。

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I have been a member of a singing club since primary school. I often invite my friends to go to karaoke with me.

提案: 回答内容较为清晰，但表达略显口语化且有语法错误，如“or I never studied”应为“nor have I studied”。建议使用更正式和连贯的表达。

例: No, I have never received formal singing training or studied at a professional school. I usually try to imitate famous singers like Ariana Grande because I really enjoy her songs.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，句子不连贯。建议简化句子，明确表达意图，并注意语法和词汇的准确使用。

例: If I had the chance, I would like to sing for my parents. They don't believe I am good at singing and think my voice is calm and ordinary. I want to prove to them that I have potential as a singer.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但有拼写错误（如“sinning”应为“singing”），句子衔接可以更自然。建议注意拼写和使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Music has a mysterious power that can encourage, inspire, and heal us. Many of my friends often invite me to karaoke, and we really enjoy singing together.

× I have joined a singing club since I was in a primary school until now.

✓ I have joined a singing club since I was in primary school until now.

“primary school”前不需要冠词“a”，因为这里指的是小学这个阶段，而不是某一所具体的小学。

× I still will invite some of my friends to go to the karaoke.

✓ I will still invite some of my friends to go to karaoke.

“still”应放在助动词“will”之后，且“karaoke”前不需要冠词“the”，因为这里指的是卡拉OK活动，而非特定的场所。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

“learnt”和“learned”都是“learn”的过去分词，英式英语用“learnt”，美式英语用“learned”，根据语境选择一致的形式。

× I haven't been trained systematically or I never studied singing in a professional school.

✓ I haven't been trained systematically and I have never studied singing in a professional school.

两个否定句应使用并列连词“and”，且“never studied”应用现在完成时“have never studied”，表示从过去到现在的经历。

× I just try to imitate the singing stars like Ariana.

✓ I just try to imitate singing stars like Ariana.

“the singing stars”中的定冠词“the”不必要，表示泛指。

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

该句无语法错误，符合口语习惯。

× Oh my God if I got a chance I would like to save for my parents because they never believe I'm good at saying they just thought my voice is so calm and normal but I ha I want to sing for them to prove that I have the potential to be a senior.

✓ Oh my God, if I got a chance, I would like to sing for my parents because they never believe I'm good at singing. They just think my voice is so calm and normal, but I want to sing for them to prove that I have the potential to be a singer.

句子结构混乱，缺少标点，且“save”应为“sing”，“saying”应为“singing”，“thought”应为“think”，且“senior”应为“singer”。需要分句并调整词汇。

× Yes, I believe sinning can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people.

“sinning”是“犯罪”的意思，正确词应为“singing”，表示“唱歌”。

× Music always has this kind of mystery. Power can encourage people, inspire people and heal them.

✓ Music always has this kind of mysterious power. It can encourage people, inspire people and heal them.

“mystery”是名词，需用形容词“mysterious”修饰“power”，使表达更准确。

× And most of my friends, they will invite me to go to karaoke in their spare time.

✓ Most of my friends invite me to go to karaoke in their spare time.

“most of my friends”与“they”重复，去掉“they”更简洁。

× We really cherish the time we sing together.

✓ We really cherish the time we spend singing together.

“the time we sing together”表达不完整，需加动词“spend”及动名词“singing”表示动作。