Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免冗长且不连贯的表达，同时注意时态和单复数的正确使用。可以尝试用更自然的表达方式描述喜欢唱歌的原因。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I like K-pop music. My favorite group is EXO, and I often try to imitate their singing style. They also have songs in Chinese, which makes it even more interesting for me. Singing brings me a lot of joy.

提案: 回答中重复使用了“because”，句子结构不够简洁。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，同时补充更多细节说明为什么没有时间学习唱歌。

例: No, I have never taken professional singing lessons because I am very busy studying law. My studies require most of my time and attention, so I haven't had the chance to practice singing properly.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不完整，建议使用完整句子并明确表达想为母亲唱歌的原因。可以增加具体细节来丰富内容。

例: I want to sing for my mom because she always supports me, especially when I face difficulties. She gives me advice on how to solve problems, and singing for her would be a way to show my gratitude.

提案: 回答中多处词汇使用错误（如'seeing'应为'singing'），句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议注意词汇准确性，使用完整句子，并具体说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their feelings and relieve stress. When people sing, they often feel more relaxed and joyful.

× I'm a big fan of Same because I like K pop, my favorite singer is XO so I wanted to mimic their voice and sing their songs even in its career.

✓ I'm a big fan of Same because I like K-pop. My favorite singer is XO, so I wanted to mimic their voice and sing their songs even in their career.

这里的“their”指代复数，符合XO作为歌手团体的复数用法，原句中“its career”错误地使用了单数物主代词，应改为复数物主代词“their”。

× But it also have songs that is in Chinese so I love singing and enjoy this moment.

✓ But it also has songs that are in Chinese, so I love singing and enjoy this moment.

主语“it”指代单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“has”，而不是“have”。此外，“songs”是复数，谓语动词应为“are”而非“is”。

× I have never learned how to sing in professional class because I don't have much time to practice how to sing because I'm a student majoring in law.

✓ I have never learned how to sing in a professional class because I don't have much time to practice singing since I'm a student majoring in law.

“professional class”前应加不定冠词“a”。此外，“practice how to sing”表达不自然，改为“practice singing”更符合英语习惯。

× I have to focus my attention.

✓ I have to focus my attention on my studies.

“focus”后通常搭配介词“on”，表示专注于某事，原句缺少介词，导致表达不完整。

× To be honest, I wanna sing for my mom because she always give a hand for me especially when I made some feedbacks.

✓ To be honest, I want to sing for my mom because she always gives me a hand, especially when I receive some feedback.

“she”作为第三人称单数，谓语动词应为“gives”而非“give”。“give a hand for me”应改为“gives me a hand”。“made some feedbacks”表达错误，反馈不可数，应改为“receive some feedback”。

× Each time she will tell me how to fix these problems instead of just.

✓ Each time she tells me how to fix these problems instead of just ignoring them.

原句“instead of just”不完整，缺少后续内容，导致句子不完整，应补充完整表达。

× Seeing is a good way to make people feel happiness and meaningful because in the process of seeing, it's a perfect way to express their. Situation and distress.

✓ Singing is a good way to make people feel happy and meaningful because in the process of singing, it's a perfect way to express their situation and distress.

原句中“Seeing”应为“Singing”，且“feel happiness”应改为“feel happy”，形容词用法更合适。“express their. Situation and distress”句子断裂，应连贯为“express their situation and distress”。