Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban terdengar lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

提案: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan jelas.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was at school, I participated in a course where I practiced basic vocal training and learned about pitch and timing. Singing has always interested me because it helps me express emotions and boosts my confidence.

提案: Perluas jawaban dengan memberikan alasan atau contoh agar lebih spesifik dan menarik.

例: I like to sing for everyone, especially my family and friends, because I enjoy sharing happiness through music.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan makna kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan relevan dengan pertanyaan. Gunakan alasan yang logis dan spesifik.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and express their feelings.

× Yes, I feel very like singing, because when I singing I feel. Comfort. That's fine.

✓ Yes, I really like singing, because when I sing I feel comfortable. That's fine.

The phrase 'feel very like singing' is incorrect; 'like' should not be used with 'feel' in this way. Also, 'when I singing' should be 'when I sing' because after 'when' we use the base form of the verb. 'Feel comfort' should be 'feel comfortable' to use the correct adjective form.

× Yes, I have learned how to say. When I was in this school, I took part in the tour where I revised basic focal training and learning about pitch and time.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in this school, I took part in a tour where I revised basic vocal training and learned about pitch and timing.

The phrase 'how to say' should be 'how to sing' to match the context. 'Revised basic focal training' should be 'revised basic vocal training' (likely a typo). 'Learning' should be 'learned' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Pitch and time' is better expressed as 'pitch and timing'.

× Singing was always interested me because it helps express emotions and improves my confidence.

✓ Singing has always interested me because it helps express emotions and improves my confidence.

'Singing was always interested me' is incorrect; the correct form is 'Singing has always interested me' to indicate a continuing interest. Also, 'interested me' requires the subject to be 'Singing' and the verb 'has interested' in present perfect tense.

× I sing for everyone.

✓ I sing for everyone.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no correction needed.

× Yes, I can think can bring happiness to people because the singing is afraid God for me.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing is like a prayer to me.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'I can think can bring' should be 'I think singing can bring'. 'The singing is afraid God for me' is unclear; likely intended meaning is 'singing is like a prayer to me'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical structure.