Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'in the HE as a singer' and 'in the street situation', use clearer expressions. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I really like singing, even though my voice is not like a professional singer's. I enjoy it because it helps me relax and enjoy myself. For example, I often sing when I am walking outside or feeling stressed. Singing makes me feel happier and more comfortable.

提案: Improve your answer by using complete sentences and linking words to make it more coherent. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and clarify your ideas. For example, instead of 'Like open the music on the YouTube', say 'I usually play music on YouTube and sing along'.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing professionally. I just enjoy singing by myself. Usually, I play music on YouTube and sing along for fun. I do it because it makes me happy, not because I want to be a singer.

提案: Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence and then adding supporting details with linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes and avoid redundancy.

例: I don't sing for anyone else; I sing just for myself to enjoy and relax. For example, I usually sing when I feel happy or sad, often singing along with my favorite songs.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and complete sentences. Use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, provide specific examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and express their feelings. For example, when I am stressed, I go to my room, play music loudly, and sing along. This helps me feel better and happier.

× It's because it's helped me to relax and enjoy myself, for example when I'm in the street situation.

✓ It's because it has helped me to relax and enjoy myself, for example when I'm in stressful situations.

The phrase 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' to correctly use the present perfect tense indicating an action that has relevance to the present. Also, 'street situation' is unclear; 'stressful situations' is more appropriate here.

× Like open the music on the YouTube and then just sing along.

✓ Like opening music on YouTube and then just singing along.

The verb 'open' should be in the gerund form 'opening' to correctly express the action. Also, 'on the YouTube' is incorrect; it should be 'on YouTube' without 'the'.

× No one just for myself, like just to enjoy by myself, to relax.

✓ No one, just for myself, like just to enjoy myself, to relax.

The phrase 'enjoy by myself' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy myself' as 'enjoy' is a verb that takes a direct object, not a prepositional phrase here.

× Like I usually singing when I am happy or sad or singing along with my favorite song.

✓ Like I usually sing when I am happy or sad or sing along with my favorite song.

The verb 'singing' should be in the base form 'sing' to agree with the auxiliary 'usually' indicating habitual action.

× Yes, it's helped a lot to relax and really form the stories.

✓ Yes, it helps a lot to relax and really form the stories.

'It's helped' should be 'it helps' to express a general truth or habitual action in the present tense.

× For example, when I I'm in the stress situation and then I come back to my room and then I just open the song loudly and then sing my.

✓ For example, when I'm in a stressful situation, I come back to my room, turn on a song loudly, and then sing.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect phrasing. 'I I'm' is incorrect; 'stress situation' should be 'stressful situation'; 'open the song' should be 'turn on a song'; 'sing my' is incomplete and should be 'sing'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.