Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'admire singing' and 'with that activity'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings effectively.

提案: Your answer provides good details but can be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words like 'also' and 'besides' properly. Avoid awkward phrases like 'at a stone throw distance'.

例: Yes, I learned singing at school from a music teacher who taught us various instruments. Besides, I joined a music academy near my hometown, which helped me improve my basic music knowledge.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Make your sentences simpler and more direct. Use correct verb forms and structure to express your idea clearly.

例: I like to sing for my mother because she loves music and enjoys listening to my songs.

提案: Good answer with relevant content. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases like 'relax and unwind'.

例: Certainly, singing is therapeutic and soothing; moreover, it helps people relax and express their emotions effectively.

× Definitely, I really admire singing because it helps me to relax and rewind and I can easily express my feelings with that activity.

✓ Definitely, I really admire singing because it helps me to relax and unwind and I can easily express my feelings through that activity.

The word 'rewind' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'unwind' which means to relax. Also, 'with that activity' is better expressed as 'through that activity' to indicate the means of expression.

× Yes, I used to learn singing when I was in my school.

✓ Yes, I used to learn singing when I was in school.

The phrase 'in my school' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'in school' when referring to the period of schooling. Also, 'used to learn singing' is acceptable but 'used to take singing lessons' would be more natural.

× There was the music teacher who used to teach us all the instruments.

✓ There was a music teacher who used to teach us all the instruments.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used here; since the teacher is being introduced for the first time, the indefinite article 'a' should be used.

× Apart from this, I have also joined a music Academy which was at a stone throw distance from my hometown and that really helped me to enhance my fundamental knowledge towards music.

✓ Apart from this, I also joined a music academy which was a stone's throw away from my hometown and that really helped me to enhance my fundamental knowledge of music.

The phrase 'at a stone throw distance' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'a stone's throw away'. Also, 'knowledge towards music' should be 'knowledge of music'. 'Have also joined' is changed to 'also joined' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I really admire singing songs for my mother as she is really very musical person and admires to sing the listens the song that are sings by me.

✓ I really enjoy singing songs for my mother as she is a very musical person and enjoys listening to the songs that I sing.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and verb form errors. 'Admires to sing the listens the song that are sings by me' is incorrect. It should be 'enjoys listening to the songs that I sing'. Also, 'admire singing songs' is better expressed as 'enjoy singing songs'. 'Musical person' needs an article 'a' before it.