Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，例如“skills for seeing”和“I seeing is not good”表达不准确，影响了语言的自然流畅。建议你在回答时注意语法结构，使用正确的动词形式，并且避免重复和冗余。

例: No, I don't like singing because I am not good at it, and I often lose confidence when people criticize me.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“when I'm in primary school”应为过去时，“don't have any rules for me”表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和更准确的表达方式，同时增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, when I was in primary school, I took some singing classes, but I didn't find any specific rules helpful, so I think singing well requires talent.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“I don't need to”重复且不完整，“activities for our to reduce pressure”表达不准确。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I want to sing for my close friends because I don't have to worry about singing perfectly, and it helps us relax and reduce stress.

提案: 回答中充满了填充词“uh”，影响流畅性，且“seeing with my friends in Katy way”表达不清晰。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，增强表达的清晰度和连贯性。

例: Yes, especially singing with my friends in a karaoke room. It makes me feel relaxed and happy, and it's a great way to relieve stress together.

× No I don't like singing because I don't have skills for seeing and I seeing is not good and especially there are many people saying make me lose confidence.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I don't have skills for singing and my singing is not good, and especially there are many people saying things that make me lose confidence.

这里'skills'应为复数形式，但'seeing'应为'singing'，且'seeing'是拼写错误。'I seeing is not good'结构错误，应改为'my singing is not good'。此外，'people saying make me lose confidence'缺少宾语，应补充完整。

× Yes, when I'm in primary school I went to some class to study how to sing but don't have any rules for me so I think it's need talent to sing well.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, I went to some classes to study how to sing but they didn't have any rules for me, so I think it needs talent to sing well.

'I'm'应为过去时态'was'，'some class'应为复数'some classes'，'don't have'应为过去时态'didn't have'，'it's need'应为'it needs'。时态和单复数错误导致句子不通顺。

× I want to sing for my close friends or best friend because I don't need to.

✓ I want to sing for my close friends or best friend because I don't need to worry.

句子不完整，'I don't need to'后面缺少动词，导致意思不明确。应补充完整表达。

× I don't need to worry about how to sing well and it's just activities for our to reduce pressure.

✓ I don't need to worry about how to sing well and it's just an activity for us to reduce pressure.

'activities'应为单数'an activity'，'our'应为宾格' us'，代词使用错误。

× Yes, uh, especially, uh, seeing with my friends in Katy way, it can make me more, uh, relaxed and comfortable and it can improve, uh, my happiness with my friends.

✓ Yes, especially singing with my friends in Katy way, it can make me more relaxed and comfortable and it can improve my happiness with my friends.

'seeing'应为'singing'，拼写错误。

× Uh, it's a good activity, uh, for our to reduce our pressure.

✓ Uh, it's a good activity for us to reduce our pressure.

'our'应为宾格' us'，代词使用错误。