Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'the best way to feel the free time' which is unclear. Use clearer expressions and link your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax during my free time and relieves stress. Whenever I feel overwhelmed, singing calms me down effectively.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Avoid awkward phrases like 'joint classes in offline mode'. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about how learning helped you.

例: A few years ago, I attended singing classes in person to improve my skills. Since then, I regularly practice the notes I learned, which has helped me become a better singer.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains errors. 'The boyfriend whom I admire the most is my mother' is incorrect. Be direct and clear. Use simple sentences and correct pronouns to express your feelings.

例: I would love to sing for my mother because she makes me very happy and comfortable. She is the person I admire the most.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Avoid vague phrases like 'in this scenario' and 'they insist'. Use linking words and give specific reasons why singing brings happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because many people have busy lives and singing helps them relax. It also encourages positive emotions and good values.

× Indeed, I love to sing because it is the best way to feel the free time and secondly when I am feeling stressful.

✓ Indeed, I love to sing because it is the best way to enjoy free time and secondly when I am feeling stressed.

The phrase 'feel the free time' is incorrect; 'enjoy free time' is more appropriate. Also, 'feeling stressful' is incorrect because 'stressful' describes a situation, not a feeling. The correct form is 'feeling stressed' to describe the person's state.

× So to de stress myself I usually sing for a while.

✓ So to de-stress myself, I usually sing for a while.

The term 'de stress' should be hyphenated as 'de-stress' when used as a verb. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.

× If I talk about few years back, then I had joint classes in offline mode so that I could learn to sing and it really helps me very well because nowadays I usually practice those notes and it really proved me effective.

✓ If I talk about a few years back, then I had joined classes in offline mode so that I could learn to sing and it really helped me very well because nowadays I usually practice those notes and it really proves effective for me.

'Joint' is incorrect; the past participle 'joined' is needed here (Grammar Problem Type 9). 'Helps' should be in past tense 'helped' to match the past context (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'Proved me effective' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'proves effective for me'.

× The boyfriend whom I admire the most is my mother and definitely I would love to sing for her because she's the only person with whom I feel very much happy as well as I come into the comfort zone with her.

✓ The person whom I admire the most is my mother and definitely I would love to sing for her because she's the only person with whom I feel very happy and comfortable.

Calling mother 'boyfriend' is incorrect pronoun use. Also, 'feel very much happy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'feel very happy'. 'Come into the comfort zone with her' is awkward; 'feel comfortable' is better.

× So that is the only person whom I want to sing for.

✓ So that is the only person for whom I want to sing.

The preposition 'for' should come before the relative pronoun 'whom' in formal English.

× Yes, definitely, because in this scenario most of the people prefer singing because there is very much hectic schedule so people couldn't able to distress themselves.

✓ Yes, definitely, because in this scenario most people prefer singing because there is a very hectic schedule so people couldn't distress themselves.

'Most of the people' is better as 'most people'. 'Very much hectic schedule' is incorrect; 'a very hectic schedule' is correct. 'Couldn't able to distress' is incorrect; 'couldn't distress' is correct.

× So to make them happy as well as to inculcate good values in them they insist.

✓ So to make them happy as well as to inculcate good values in them, they insist on singing.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'insist on singing' clarifies the meaning. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves readability.