Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用连词连接原因，使表达更流畅。

例: No, I don't like singing because I can't sing very well. Also, I feel embarrassed when others listen to me, so I avoid singing in public.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但表达不够自然，句子衔接不够流畅。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并用连词连接句子。

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was a child because my parents wanted me to develop some talents. However, I only took lessons for about two months because I realized it wasn't suitable for me.

提案: 回答较好，但部分句子结构重复，表达可以更简洁自然。建议适当调整句子结构，避免重复。

例: I would like to sing for people celebrating their birthdays. At such parties, friends and family usually gather to sing and share happiness. Singing is my way to express best wishes and make the event more special.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，影响表达清晰度。建议注意时态和词汇使用，句子结构更准确。

例: Yes, definitely. Singing on special occasions allows people to express their emotions and connect with others. For example, at birthday parties, singing creates a joyful atmosphere and conveys good wishes.

× Actually, I do not like singing because I think when I was singing, I Can't Sing in very well and I will receive the judgment from the someone likes to listen to me, so I feel ashamed about my voice and yes.

✓ Actually, I do not like singing because I think when I am singing, I can't sing very well and I will receive judgment from someone who likes to listen to me, so I feel ashamed about my voice.

句中“when I was singing”时态不符合语境，应使用现在进行时“when I am singing”；“Can't Sing in very well”中“Sing”不应大写且“in”多余，应为“can't sing very well”；“the someone likes to listen to me”结构错误，应为“someone who likes to listen to me”。这些错误属于动词现在分词形式和句子结构错误。

× Yes, I've learned how to sing when I was a child because my parents wanted to explore and develop some talents for me.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child because my parents wanted to explore and develop some talents for me.

句中“I've learned”和“when I was a child”时间状语不匹配，表示过去的动作应使用一般过去时“learned”，而非现在完成时。

× So I've learned how to sing for maybe two months and that it seems like it's not a good choice for me.

✓ So I learned how to sing for maybe two months and it seemed like it was not a good choice for me.

句中“I've learned”和“seems”时态不统一，描述过去经历应使用一般过去时“learned”和“seemed”。

× I would like to sing for someone who is celebrating their birthday.

✓ I would like to sing for someone who is celebrating his or her birthday.

“someone”是单数，后面应使用单数代词“his or her”而非复数“their”，以保持代词一致性。

× Usually during birthday parties like friends and family gather together to sing birthday songs and share happiness.

✓ Usually during birthday parties, friends and family gather together to sing birthday songs and share happiness.

句中“like”用法错误，应去掉“like”或改为“when”，此处直接用逗号分隔更合适。

× As I said earlier, seeing can in special occasion can allows people to express their emotion and connect with others.

✓ As I said earlier, singing on special occasions can allow people to express their emotions and connect with others.

“seeing”应为“singing”；“can allows”动词形式错误，应为“can allow”；“in special occasion”介词和单复数错误，应为“on special occasions”；“emotion”应为复数“emotions”。这些错误涉及动词现在分词形式、动词搭配和介词使用。

× Like during the birthday party, singing helps create a joyful atmosphere and send my wishes to someone.

✓ Like during the birthday party, singing helps create a joyful atmosphere and send my wishes to someone.

此句语法正确，无需修改。