Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. For example, instead of 'I particularly not fond of them,' say 'I am not particularly fond of singing.' Use linking words like 'because' to connect reasons logically.

例: I am not particularly fond of singing because I don't have a good singing voice. Also, I feel nervous and embarrassed when I have to sing in front of people, so I usually avoid it.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Avoid starting sentences with 'while' followed by 'but' as it is contradictory. Use past tense consistently and clarify your meaning. Also, try to provide more specific details about your experience with singing lessons or practice.

例: I started learning to sing when I was a child, but I didn't improve much. Because of that, I decided to give up singing as a hobby.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but has grammatical errors and awkward expressions. Use correct word forms (e.g., 'close friends' instead of 'closing friends') and complete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points.

例: If I had a chance to sing for someone, I would choose my family because they are my close friends and soul mates. I believe they would encourage me and give me their best wishes, which would make the moment very special.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more concise. Avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily (e.g., 'people near me they'). Use linking words like 'for example' effectively and provide a bit more explanation.

例: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the type of song. For example, if I sing a relaxing and cheerful song, people around me will feel happy and relieved from stress.

× I particularly not fond of them because I don't have a virtual singing voice.

✓ I am particularly not fond of singing because I don't have a virtual singing voice.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'them' to refer to singing, which is uncountable and should not be replaced by 'them'. Also, the verb 'am' is missing after 'I' to form the correct present tense structure 'I am particularly not fond'.

× In addition, I also afraid to stand on the stage if I gonna to sing and I will also feel embarrassed when I saw the people watching on me.

✓ In addition, I am also afraid to stand on the stage if I am going to sing, and I will also feel embarrassed when I see the people watching me.

The sentence misses the verb 'am' after 'I' to form 'I am also afraid'. 'Gonna to' is incorrect; the correct form is 'going to'. The verb tense 'saw' should be present tense 'see' to match the future context. Also, 'watching on me' is incorrect; it should be 'watching me'.

× So I think I definitely not shoot.

✓ So I think I definitely will not sing.

The phrase 'not shoot' is incorrect and unclear in this context. The intended meaning is likely 'not sing'. Also, the auxiliary verb 'will' is needed to form the future negative 'will not'.

× While I started singing when I was a child, but it turned out to be a very bad result so I definitely choose to for give up this interest then.

✓ I started singing when I was a child, but it turned out badly, so I definitely chose to give up this interest then.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'while' and 'but' together, which is redundant. 'Bad result' should be 'badly' to describe how it turned out. 'Choose' should be past tense 'chose' to match the past context. 'For give up' is incorrect; it should be 'to give up'.

× Well, if I have a chance to sing for someone, I definitely would choose to sing for my family because they are my closing friends, they are my soul mates and I believe that they will encouraging.

✓ Well, if I have a chance to sing for someone, I would definitely choose to sing for my family because they are my close friends, they are my soul mates, and I believe that they will encourage me.

'Closing friends' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'close friends'. 'Will encouraging' is incorrect; it should be 'will encourage'. Also, adding 'me' clarifies the object of encouragement.

× Give me the best wish when I stand on the stage and it will be a very lovely moment.

✓ They will give me their best wishes when I stand on the stage, and it will be a very lovely moment.

The original sentence lacks a subject for 'Give me the best wish'. Adding 'They will' clarifies who is giving the wishes. 'Wish' should be plural 'wishes' to match common usage.

× You know, if there's only my family come to visit.

✓ You know, if only my family comes to visit.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'If there's only my family come to visit' should be 'if only my family comes to visit' to form a correct conditional clause with subject-verb agreement.

× Well I think it depends on the type of songs.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the type of song.

'Type' is singular, so it should be followed by a singular noun 'song' instead of plural 'songs'.

× For example, if I sing a relaxing and happy song, then the people near me they will feel happy as well and they will also feel relieved their stress.

✓ For example, if I sing a relaxing and happy song, then the people near me will feel happy as well, and they will also feel relieved of their stress.

The sentence has redundant subject 'they' after 'the people near me'. Also, 'feel relieved their stress' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relieved of their stress' to use the correct preposition.