Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误，导致意思难以理解。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法正确，例如使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: No, I don't like singing because I am not confident in my singing skills and I feel embarrassed to sing in front of others.

提案: 回答中信息重复且表达不够连贯。建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅，同时提供更具体的细节。

例: Yes, I learned singing skills in primary school because it was a compulsory class for all students. We studied the fundamentals of music, which helped me understand singing better.

提案: 回答中出现了性别错误和语法问题，表达不够准确。建议注意代词使用和语法，同时使句子更简洁。

例: I want to sing for my grandfather because he always sings birthday songs for me. He has a beautiful voice, and I want to show my appreciation and gratitude by singing for him.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并用连接词使观点连贯。

例: I think singing can bring happiness, but not always. Singers may feel awkward if they lack confidence, and listeners might find some voices noisy or disruptive.

× No, I'm not because I'm not very seem very well and I'm not confident with my singers so I think and I also feel embarrassing while seeing in front of people.

✓ No, I don't because I don't seem very good and I'm not confident with my singing, so I think and I also feel embarrassed when singing in front of people.

这里的错误是时态和动词形式使用不当。'I'm not' 应该改为 'I don't' 来表达否定喜欢的意思；'seem very well' 应该改为 'seem very good'，因为 'well' 是副词，形容词 'good' 更合适；'feel embarrassing' 应为 'feel embarrassed'，因为这里需要用形容词来描述感受；'seeing' 应为 'singing'，因为上下文是唱歌。

× Yes, I did. I learnt skills. I learned skills about singing when I was primary school, which has a compulsory class for all the students. And we learn something about the music, the fundamental music skill about.

✓ Yes, I did. I learned skills about singing when I was in primary school, which had a compulsory class for all the students. And we learned something about music, the fundamental music skills.

这里的错误主要是时态和冠词使用不当。'was primary school' 应为 'was in primary school'，需要介词 'in'；'has' 应为过去时 'had'，因为描述的是过去的情况；'learn' 应为过去时 'learned'；'the music' 中的 'the' 不需要，直接用 'music'；'skill' 应为复数 'skills'，因为是多项技能。

× You want to sing for? I want to sing for my grandfather since he always sings birthday songs for me every year. She has beautiful voice and so I want to sing it for for him too and to express my appreciates and gratitude for.

✓ Who do you want to sing for? I want to sing for my grandfather since he always sings birthday songs for me every year. He has a beautiful voice, so I want to sing for him too and express my appreciation and gratitude.

这里的错误包括代词使用错误和词汇错误。'You want to sing for?' 应为疑问句 'Who do you want to sing for?'；'She has beautiful voice' 中 'She' 应为 'He' 指代祖父，且 'voice' 前需要冠词 'a'；'sing it for for him' 多余重复 'for'，应删去一个；'appreciates' 应为名词 'appreciation'。

× I don't think singing always brings happiness to people. From the singers, they may feel awkward especially when if they are not confident in their voice and for the listener, they may be the singer voice of the singer is just as noisy and thinks it's disruptive.

✓ I don't think singing always brings happiness to people. Singers may feel awkward, especially if they are not confident in their voice, and listeners may think the singer's voice is noisy and disruptive.

这里的错误包括连词使用和句子结构问题。'especially when if' 应只用 'especially if'；'for the listener, they may be the singer voice of the singer is just as noisy and thinks it's disruptive' 句子结构混乱，应改为 'listeners may think the singer's voice is noisy and disruptive'，使句子通顺且主谓一致。