Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa tự nhiên, ví dụ như 'I loved singing' nên dùng thì hiện tại 'I love singing' để phù hợp với câu hỏi hiện tại. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài dòng và có một số phần thừa, bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý một cách mạch lạc hơn.

例: I love singing because it helps me improve my pronunciation and vocabulary. For example, I usually sing English songs, which makes learning fun and interesting. Besides, singing allows me to immerse myself in the rhythm and helps me unwind after a long day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng và mạch lạc, tuy nhiên bạn nên sử dụng thêm liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn, ví dụ như 'so' hoặc 'therefore'. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động và thuyết phục hơn.

例: I have never attended formal singing classes, so I usually immerse myself in the rhythm and music and sing along. I find this method very effective because it helps me improve my singing skills naturally without extra lessons.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng câu văn hơi dài và có một số lỗi nhỏ như 'help me to relax' có thể viết ngắn gọn hơn là 'help me relax'. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ như 'because' để giải thích rõ hơn lý do và làm câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: Singing is a personal hobby for me, so I usually sing for myself because I don't feel the need to perform in front of others. It helps me relax after a long day at work.

提案: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp như 'helps people too relaxed' nên là 'helps people to relax' hoặc 'helps people relax'. Bạn nên dùng các liên từ như 'because' và 'for example' một cách chính xác để câu văn rõ ràng và logic hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến thì của động từ để câu trả lời chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and express their emotions. For example, when I sing my favorite song, I feel more positive and it helps me unwind after a long day, which improves my overall well-being.

× I loved singing, especially it can helps me to improve my pronunciation and vocabulary.

✓ I love singing, especially because it can help me to improve my pronunciation and vocabulary.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'loved' (past tense) when the context implies a present preference, so 'love' (present tense) is correct. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' because 'it' is singular and modal verbs like 'can' are followed by the base form of the verb without 's'.

× For example, I use I usually sing English songs.

✓ For example, I usually sing English songs.

The phrase 'I use I usually sing' is redundant and incorrect. The correct structure is 'I usually sing'. The extra 'I use' should be removed for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And besides, I also singing because I want to immerse myself into the rhythm and it helps me to unwind after the long day at.

✓ And besides, I also sing because I want to immerse myself in the rhythm and it helps me to unwind after a long day.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary verb; it should be 'I also sing'. Also, the preposition 'into' is incorrect here; 'immerse myself in' is the correct phrase. The phrase 'after the long day at' is incomplete and should be 'after a long day'.

× Instead I just immerse myself into the rhythm, the music and then sing along.

✓ Instead, I just immerse myself in the rhythm, the music and then sing along.

The correct preposition with 'immerse myself' is 'in', not 'into'. Also, a comma after 'Instead' improves sentence clarity.

× I find this method really effective and it is one way for me to improve my singing skill naturally without going to any extra classes.

✓ I find this method really effective and it is one way for me to improve my singing skills naturally without going to any extra classes.

The noun 'skill' should be plural 'skills' because 'singing skills' is the common collocation when referring to abilities in singing.

× Singing to me is more like a personal hobby, so I usually sing for myself, not for the other people.

✓ Singing to me is more like a personal hobby, so I usually sing for myself, not for other people.

The phrase 'the other people' is incorrect here; 'other people' without 'the' is appropriate when referring to people in general.

× I don't feel the need to perform in front of the audience or a lot of people, so I just sing for myself to help me to relax after the long day at work.

✓ I don't feel the need to perform in front of an audience or a lot of people, so I just sing for myself to help me relax after a long day at work.

Use 'an audience' instead of 'the audience' because it refers to any audience, not a specific one. Also, 'help me to relax' can be simplified to 'help me relax'. 'The long day at work' should be 'a long day at work' to indicate any typical day.

× I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people too relaxed and express their emotion.

✓ I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people to relax and express their emotions.

The phrase 'too relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'to relax'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because people express various feelings.

× For example, when I sing my favorite song, I feel more positive and help me to unwind after the long day at work which improve my overall well-being.

✓ For example, when I sing my favorite song, I feel more positive and it helps me to unwind after a long day at work, which improves my overall well-being.

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' before 'helps me'. Also, 'the long day at work' should be 'a long day at work'. The verb 'improve' should be 'improves' to agree with the singular subject 'which' (referring to the whole preceding clause).