Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and keep it natural.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me reduce stress and makes me feel relaxed after a long day.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I have been learning to sing for two months, and I often attend singing classes to improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a complete sentence explaining why singing for your parents is special, and avoid vague phrases like 'they are my things'.

例: I would like to sing for my parents because it makes me happy to express my love and appreciation for them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a clear opinion with supporting details, using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and connect with others.

× Yes, I love this thing this because things makes me. Reduce stress and makes me relaxing.

✓ Yes, I love this thing because it makes me reduce stress and feel relaxed.

The sentence has singular and plural mismatches: 'things makes me' should be 'it makes me' to agree in number. Also, 'makes me relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relaxed' to correctly express the effect on the speaker.

× Yes, I have learned singing for two months.

✓ Yes, I have been learning singing for two months.

The present perfect continuous tense 'have been learning' is more appropriate here to indicate an action that started in the past and is still ongoing. 'Have learned' suggests a completed action, which conflicts with the ongoing nature implied by 'for two months'.

× I often take singing classes.

✓ I often take singing classes.

This sentence is correct; no preposition error is present.

× I would like to sing for my parents. Singing for my parents feels special because they are. My things.

✓ I would like to sing for my parents. Singing for my parents feels special because they are my everything.

The phrase 'they are. My things.' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'they are my everything' to express the intended meaning that the parents are very important to the speaker.

× Yes, I think singing brings happiness to people. Seeing through different. To spread other people.

✓ Yes, I think singing brings happiness to people. It helps to spread joy to others in different ways.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Seeing through different. To spread other people.' lacks proper sentence structure and meaning. The correction provides a complete and coherent sentence conveying the intended idea.