Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clearer and more natural explanation. Avoid repeating words and make your sentences more fluent. For example, explain why you don't like singing with a simple reason and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good, so I feel uncomfortable when I sing.

提案: Make sure your answer is relevant and clear. Avoid confusing phrases like 'learn how to think.' Instead, explain clearly why you haven't learned singing, using simple and correct expressions.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I never had the opportunity to take singing lessons.

提案: Avoid repeating words and try to explain more about who Amdeep is and why you want to sing for him. This will make your answer more specific and interesting.

例: I want to sing for Amdeep because I really enjoy his music, and I would love to perform songs like his.

提案: Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases like 'happiness reference.' Try to explain clearly how singing helps people express emotions and feel happy, using linking words for coherence.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them express their emotions and feel joyful.

× No, I never learned how to sing because I don't have the chance to learn how to think.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing because I haven't had the chance to learn how to sing.

The sentence uses 'never learned' which is simple past tense, but the context implies an experience up to now, so present perfect 'have never learned' is more appropriate. Also, 'don't have the chance' should be 'haven't had the chance' to match the present perfect context. Additionally, 'learn how to think' seems to be a typo and should be 'learn how to sing'.

× I want to sing for Amdeep. I like his songs and I would like to sing sing such songs.

✓ I want to sing for Amdeep. I like his songs and I would like to sing such songs.

The word 'sing' is repeated twice by mistake. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence. This is a singular/plural issue as it affects the count of the verb usage.

× I think it's very clear that singing can bring happiness to people. It allows people to express their their emotions and their happiness reference.

✓ I think it's very clear that singing can bring happiness to people. It allows people to express their emotions and their happiness.

The phrase 'their their' is a repetition error and 'happiness reference' is incorrect usage. Removing the duplicate pronoun and 'reference' clarifies the meaning. The pronoun 'their' should be used correctly without repetition.