Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。例えば、「singing was my siblings and friends」は意味が不明瞭です。より自然な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることを意識しましょう。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and motivated, especially when I'm feeling sad. I believe singing has a special power to express emotions and uplift people's spirits.

提案: 回答が質問に対して直接的でなく、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して明確に答え、理由や経験を具体的に述べるようにしましょう。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I tried learning music once, but I lost interest and decided to stop.

提案: 回答に文法の誤りがあり、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。質問に対して直接答え、理由を明確に述べることが大切です。

例: I want to sing for myself because music gives me strength and helps me through different stages of my life. Certain songs remind me of specific moments, so singing helps me connect with those memories.

提案: 回答は比較的良いですが、より具体的な例や理由を加えるとさらに良くなります。また、接続詞を使って文の流れを滑らかにしましょう。

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because music has a special power to touch our hearts. For example, when people feel sad, they often sing their favorite songs to feel better, and when they are happy, singing helps them express their joy.

× Yes I like singing because singing was my siblings and friends makes me very happy and motivated even when I'm sad And also singing has power in my opinion because whenever people feel sad and happy there's always music by.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing with my siblings and friends makes me very happy and motivated even when I'm sad. Also, singing has power in my opinion because whenever people feel sad or happy, there's always music.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'was' instead of 'with' and mixes singular and plural forms. 'Singing was my siblings and friends' is incorrect; it should be 'singing with my siblings and friends' to indicate accompaniment. Also, 'makes' agrees with the singular subject 'singing' which is correct. The sentence was also run-on and needed punctuation for clarity.

× I have never learned how to think, I just think for joy.

✓ I have never learned how to sing; I just sing for joy.

The student likely meant 'sing' instead of 'think'. The verb 'learned' is correctly in the present perfect tense to indicate experience up to now. The sentence also needed correction for the intended meaning.

× I was trying to learn music and how to think but it makes me feel not to be interested in anymore so I gave up.

✓ I was trying to learn music and how to sing, but it made me lose interest, so I gave up.

The verb tense should be consistent in past tense ('was trying', 'made', 'gave up'). 'Makes me feel not to be interested' is awkward and incorrect; 'made me lose interest' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'how to think' should be 'how to sing'.

× I'd like to think for myself because singing and music is something that gives me power all the time and every level of my life.

✓ I'd like to sing for myself because singing and music are things that give me power all the time and at every level of my life.

'Think' should be 'sing' to match the context. 'Singing and music' is a compound subject and should take the plural verb 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'every level of my life' needs the preposition 'at' for correctness.

× There's the music that reminds me of the specific situation.

✓ There is music that reminds me of specific situations.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' and is singular; 'music' is uncountable and singular, so 'there is music' is correct. However, 'the specific situation' is too definite; 'specific situations' is more natural here to indicate various occasions.

× So whenever I feel those type of situation, I choose to think.

✓ So whenever I feel those types of situations, I choose to sing.

'Those type of situation' is incorrect; it should be 'those types of situations' to match plural demonstrative 'those' with plural noun 'types' and 'situations'. Also, 'choose to think' should be 'choose to sing' to fit context.

× Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because music has special power in everyone's heart.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because music has a special power in everyone's heart.

'Music has special power' is acceptable, but adding the article 'a' before 'special power' makes it more natural. This is an article error (ID 22), but since it's closely related to singular/plural usage, it's noted here.

× Everyone has their special song or favorite type of music.

✓ Everyone has his or her special song or favorite type of music.

'Everyone' is singular, so the pronoun should be singular ('his or her') instead of plural 'their'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12), but also relates to singular/plural agreement.

× Whenever they feel sad or happy or any other feeling, I think they choose to sing.

✓ Whenever they feel sad, happy, or any other feeling, I think they choose to sing.

The repeated use of 'or' is awkward; using commas and a single 'or' before the last item is the correct conjunction usage for listing items.