Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容丰富，但句子较长且部分表达重复，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions. I started learning to sing in kindergarten and later joined a choir, which deepened my passion for it.

提案: 回答内容具体，但存在口头语“umm”，影响流畅度。建议减少口头语，使用更准确的词汇表达，同时注意句子连贯性。

例: Yes, I took singing lessons in elementary school and joined the school choir. I can sing high notes and difficult sounds, but I still find it challenging to convey emotions effectively through my singing.

提案: 回答内容具体且有逻辑，表达清晰。建议在句子间使用更多连接词，使表达更连贯自然。

例: I want to sing for people working late at night on the streets because they might feel tired or sad. By singing, I hope to uplift their spirits and encourage them, as music can bring comfort and a sense of connection.

提案: 回答未完成且有重复词汇，缺乏具体细节。建议完整表达观点，避免重复，并提供具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it expresses emotions and connects people. For example, my favorite song, "Shine Your Way," always lifts my mood and makes me feel hopeful about the future.

× Then I found that singing has not only been a hobby for me and I love singing because it can also help me express my feelings and help me.

✓ Then I found that singing is not only a hobby for me, and I love singing because it can also help me express my feelings and help me.

句子中描述的是现在的状态，应该使用一般现在时。原句中使用了现在完成时“has been”，不符合语境。建议将“has not only been”改为“is not only”，以表达现在的事实。

× I used to take singing lessons when I was in elementary school and I was even selected as a member of our school choir UMM, and I am able to sing in a very high pitch and also sing some umm, very difficult sounds.

✓ I used to take singing lessons when I was in elementary school, and I was even selected as a member of our school choir. UMM, I am able to sing in a very high pitch and also sing some, umm, very difficult sounds.

原句中“choir UMM”缺少逗号分隔，导致句子结构混乱。应将“choir UMM”分开，明确表达。此处主要是句子结构问题，属于单复数和句子结构相关。

× Then I found that singing has not only been a hobby for me and I love singing because it can also help me express my feelings and help me.

✓ Then I found that singing has not only been a hobby for me, but I also love singing because it can help me express my feelings and help me.

“not only... and...”的搭配不正确，正确用法是“not only... but also...”。原句中缺少“but also”，导致连接词使用错误。建议改为“not only... but also...”结构。

× The lyrics and melodies often uplift uplift people's spirits and help us feel more optimistic about our future and as if we can solve any problems.

✓ The lyrics and melodies often uplift people's spirits and help us feel more optimistic about our future, as if we can solve any problems.

原句中“uplift uplift”重复，属于用词错误。且“and as if we can solve any problems”连接不当，应去掉“and”，使句子更通顺。建议删除重复词并调整连接词。

× Whenever I listen to it, I feel.

✓ Whenever I listen to it, I feel happy.

原句缺少谓语补语，导致句子不完整。应补充完整的表达，如“feel happy”，使句子结构完整。