Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and effective by avoiding redundancy and expanding slightly with linking words. Try to directly answer the question first, then add a reason with a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, but only when I'm alone because I feel more comfortable that way.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains filler words. Try to give a direct answer first, then provide specific details with linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

例: I haven't formally learned to sing recently, but I did take music classes in secondary school where we learned some singing techniques.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Avoid unrelated phrases and structure your response with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: I usually feel shy singing in public, but if I had the chance, I would sing for someone I love because it would be a special moment.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and word choice errors. Use simpler, clearer sentences and linking words to express your opinion effectively.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because singers express their emotions through their songs, which helps listeners connect and feel joyful.

× I'm not a professional singer at all. Yes, I like singing, but in my own space, not publicly.

✓ I'm not a professional singer at all. Yes, I like singing, but only in my own space, not publicly.

The original sentence is mostly correct, but adding 'only' clarifies the limitation of singing to a private space, improving clarity and naturalness in English.

× I'd say no to this because I haven't learned in a while.

✓ I'd say no to this because I haven't learned how to sing before.

The phrase 'haven't learned in a while' is vague and does not clearly express the idea of never having learned singing. Changing it to 'haven't learned how to sing before' clarifies the meaning and fits the context better.

× Uh, when I was in my secondary school at that time, we used to have a music class and we used to learn some stuff, but not now.

✓ Uh, when I was in secondary school, we used to have a music class and we used to learn some things, but not now.

The phrase 'in my secondary school at that time' is redundant; 'when I was in secondary school' is sufficient. Also, 'some stuff' is informal; 'some things' is more appropriate in this context.

× Anthropological quote I don't publicly feel shy.

✓ I don't feel shy singing publicly.

The original sentence is unclear and contains an irrelevant phrase 'Anthropological quote'. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning with proper sentence structure.

× I'm not a professional singer, but if I will get an opportunity to sing for somebody, I think so.

✓ I'm not a professional singer, but if I get an opportunity to sing for somebody, I think I would.

In conditional sentences referring to the future, the present simple tense ('if I get') is used in the 'if' clause, not 'will'. Also, 'I think so' is vague; 'I think I would' better expresses willingness.

× It would be for my love.

✓ It would be for my loved one.

'My love' is informal and ambiguous; 'my loved one' is clearer and more appropriate in this context.

× He is of course singing too brings happiness to others because when the singers sings their song, they sing from their heart and they usually express their feelings, their happiness, their sadness and their songs licking clearly identified from their lyrics.

✓ Of course, singing brings happiness to others because when singers sing their songs, they sing from their hearts and usually express their feelings, their happiness, their sadness, and their songs can be clearly identified from their lyrics.

The original sentence has multiple errors: unnecessary 'He is', incorrect verb agreement ('singers sings'), awkward phrase 'songs licking clearly identified'. The corrected sentence fixes subject-verb agreement, removes unnecessary words, and clarifies meaning.