Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Hãy sử dụng thì đúng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh những câu mâu thuẫn như "Singing not only live my mood but also threaten my friendship". Bạn nên nói rõ ràng về lợi ích của việc hát và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and reduce stress after a busy day at school. I often sing with my friends, which creates fun and memorable moments. Singing not only lifts my mood but also strengthens my friendship with them.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và ngữ pháp đúng, ví dụ "learned how to sing" thay vì "learned how to say". Ngoài ra, hãy mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách sử dụng liên từ và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing before. When I was a child, I took singing lessons for about a year because I really enjoyed music and wanted to improve my voice.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, ví dụ như hát cho ai hoặc vì mục đích gì. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh những từ không cần thiết như "Uh" để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family and friends because it makes me feel happy and relaxed during my free time.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ và từ vựng phù hợp để giải thích ý kiến của bạn một cách cụ thể và logic.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because melodies and joyful voices can lift their spirits. When audiences enjoy the music, it helps them relax after a long day at work.

× Hmm yes I rarely singing because it's helped me rely, reduce stress and relax after a busy day after school.

✓ Hmm yes I rarely sing because it helps me relax, reduce stress and unwind after a busy day at school.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used after 'rarely'; the base form 'sing' should be used after adverbs of frequency. Also, 'it's helped me rely' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps me relax' to match the present tense and intended meaning.

× I usually sing with my friends after OK and I really enjoy this fun and memorable moment together.

✓ I usually sing with my friends afterwards and I really enjoy these fun and memorable moments together.

The phrase 'after OK' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'afterwards' fits better. Also, 'moment' should be plural 'moments' to match 'fun and memorable' describing multiple experiences.

× Singing not only live my mood but also threaten my friendship with them.

✓ Singing not only lifts my mood but also strengthens my friendship with them.

The verbs 'live' and 'threaten' are incorrect here; 'lifts' and 'strengthens' are the correct present tense forms to express positive effects of singing.

× Yes, I have learned how to say before.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing before.

The verb 'say' is incorrect in this context; 'sing' is the correct verb related to the topic.

× When I was a child, I took singing lessons for about a year because I really enjoy music and what to improve my voice.

✓ When I was a child, I took singing lessons for about a year because I really enjoyed music and wanted to improve my voice.

The verbs 'enjoy' and 'what' are incorrect; they should be 'enjoyed' and 'wanted' to match past tense and correct word usage.

× I want to sing for my hobbies.

✓ I want to sing as a hobby.

The phrase 'sing for my hobbies' is awkward; 'sing as a hobby' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× When I sing I can relax and very comfortable in that free time.

✓ When I sing, I can relax and feel very comfortable during my free time.

The phrase 'very comfortable' needs a verb 'feel' to be grammatically correct; also, 'in that free time' should be 'during my free time'.

× Yes, in my opinion singing have a melody and happy are the voice.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, singing has a melody and a happy voice.

The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'singing'; also, the phrase is restructured for clarity.

× Love of audiences helps them relax after a long day or work day.

✓ The love of the audience helps them relax after a long day or a workday.

The phrase 'Love of audiences' is awkward; 'The love of the audience' is clearer. Also, 'work day' should be one word 'workday' and articles are added for correctness.