Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Try to directly answer the question first, then add supporting details with linking words.

例: I'm not very fond of singing, but I joined the choir in high school because it was a fun way to make new friends. Therefore, for me, singing is more of a social activity than a hobby.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about what you learned and what you didn't.

例: Yes, I learned singing in choir lessons and music courses at high school. However, they didn't focus much on technical skills like pronunciation or vocal techniques.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: I can't think of a specific person to sing for. I prefer singing with my friends at karaoke, and sometimes I sing 'Happy Birthday' songs during celebrations.

提案: Your answer is positive but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, definitely. For example, singing 'Happy Birthday' to friends is a kind gesture that brings them joy. Therefore, I believe people feel happy when someone sings for them.

× Actually I'm not a big fan of singing, but I did draw a choir in high school.

✓ Actually I'm not a big fan of singing, but I did join a choir in high school.

The verb 'draw' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'join' to express participation in a choir. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than a grammar tense issue, but since 'did draw' is past tense, the correction maintains past tense with the correct verb.

× I think it's the fun way to make new friends.

✓ I think it's a fun way to make new friends.

The article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'fun way'; it should be 'a' because it refers to one of many possible fun ways, not a specific one.

× I did learn it from my choir lesson and my music course in high school but I don't think they really teach me a like a technical skills, how to pronounce or how to sing just.

✓ I did learn it from my choir lessons and my music course in high school, but I don't think they really taught me technical skills, like how to pronounce or how to sing properly.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' (singular/plural issue), 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to match 'did learn', 'a like a technical skills' is incorrect quantifier and article usage, and 'how to sing just' is awkward and unclear, corrected to 'how to sing properly' for clarity.

× I'm not I bring can't bring up a specific person but I will rather just go to karaoke with my friend.

✓ I can't bring up a specific person, but I would rather just go to karaoke with my friends.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced pronouns and auxiliary verbs ('I'm not I bring can't bring'), which is incorrect. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of karaoke with multiple people. 'Will rather' is corrected to 'would rather' for proper modal verb usage.

× I I don't like sing for them but I I will just sing with them or I will sing a happy birthday song to my birthday.

✓ I don't like to sing for them, but I will just sing with them or I will sing a Happy Birthday song on my birthday.

The sentence has repeated pronouns 'I I' which is incorrect. 'Like sing' should be 'like to sing' for correct verb form. 'Sing a happy birthday song to my birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'on my birthday' to indicate the occasion.

× Yes definitely. I feel like singing for example you singing Happy Birthday song to your friends is a bless for them.

✓ Yes, definitely. I feel like singing, for example, singing the Happy Birthday song to your friends is a blessing for them.

Missing commas for clarity, 'you singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'Happy Birthday song' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Is a bless' is incorrect; the noun form is 'blessing'.

× So I would say they definitely feel the happiness when they heard someone sing for them.

✓ So I would say they definitely feel happiness when they hear someone sing for them.

The verb tense is inconsistent; 'would say' suggests present/future, so 'heard' should be present tense 'hear' to match. Also, 'the happiness' is better as 'happiness' without 'the' in this context.