Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid starting with 'Why yes' which sounds a bit formal and unnatural. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy by combining similar points.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it uplifts my mood and helps me forget my worries.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and adding a little detail. Instead of 'by my own', use 'on my own' which is the correct expression. Also, you can add a linking phrase to make it more coherent.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons; I usually sing on my own for fun.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and can be more structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Also, use correct tense and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually sing for myself, but whenever I get a chance, I like to sing for my parents. Although I am not a trained singer yet, I hope to sing for them properly someday.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but can be improved by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid grammatical errors and make your sentences more coherent.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because different genres of music suit different moods. For example, when someone feels low, listening to pop music can help uplift their spirits and make them enjoy themselves.

× I just do it by my own.

✓ I just do it on my own.

The phrase 'by my own' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on my own' to indicate doing something independently.

× Basically I sing for myself but whenever I got a chance I will sing for my parents.

✓ Basically I sing for myself but whenever I get a chance I will sing for my parents.

The verb 'got' is past tense but the sentence refers to a future or habitual action; 'get' (present tense) is appropriate here.

× But now I don't know properly how to sing, but someday I'll sing for my parents.

✓ But now I don't properly know how to sing, but someday I'll sing for my parents.

The adverb 'properly' should come before the verb 'know' for correct word order.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to people as there are different genre of music.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people as there are different genres of music.

The noun 'genre' should be plural 'genres' to agree with 'different' and the plural verb 'are'.

× If someone is feeling low so to uplift their mood they can use pop music to just enjoy themselves.

✓ If someone is feeling low, to uplift their mood they can use pop music to just enjoy themselves.

The conjunction 'so' is unnecessary and incorrect here; removing it improves sentence structure and clarity.