Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有较多重复和停顿，影响了流畅性。建议减少重复词汇，保持句子简洁自然，同时避免语法错误。可以用更连贯的表达来说明你不喜欢唱歌的原因，并简要提及偶尔去卡拉OK的情况。

例: I'm not very good at singing because I often sing out of tune. However, I sometimes go to karaoke with my friends just for fun and entertainment.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用正确的时态和单复数形式。可以更清楚地表达你学过唱歌但兴趣不大，导致唱歌不准。

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was a child because all primary school students in China have music lessons. However, I wasn't very interested, so I still sing out of tune.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，且有重复。建议直接回答问题，使用连贯的句子，明确说明唱歌的对象和原因，避免模糊和重复。

例: I would like to sing for my family and friends because it helps us relax and strengthens our relationships.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和重复，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，避免重复，正确使用词汇，清楚表达唱歌带来的积极影响。

例: Yes, singing can make people feel happy and improve their mood. I often go to karaoke with my friends to relax and enjoy ourselves.

× Personally, I'm not a fan of singing.

✓ Personally, I'm not a fan of singing.

No correction needed here; 'singing' is correctly used as a gerund after 'a fan of'. This sentence is grammatically correct.

× I always sing songs out of tune and, but, but I, I, I will, sometimes I will go to the karaoke just for the entertainment with my friends.

✓ I always sing songs out of tune, but sometimes I go to karaoke just for entertainment with my friends.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions and filler words. 'Will' is unnecessary here because the action is habitual or occasional, so simple present or present continuous is better. Also, 'the karaoke' should be 'karaoke' without 'the' (article error). The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a kid.

This sentence is correct; 'learned' is the correct past tense form for the action completed in the past.

× every, every children in China well would, would, would receive a musical lesson in the primary school.

✓ every child in China would receive a music lesson in primary school.

'Every' should be followed by a singular noun, so 'children' should be 'child'. Also, 'musical lesson' is better as 'music lesson'. 'The primary school' should be 'primary school' without 'the' because it refers to school in general. The sentence is corrected for singular/plural agreement and article usage.

× But I'm not quite interested in it.

✓ But I'm not quite interested in it.

This sentence is correct; 'interested' is the correct adjective form here.

× So that is why I sing songs out of tune.

✓ So that is why I sing songs out of tune.

This sentence is correct; 'songs' is plural and matches the verb 'sing'.

× I would like to sing for my families and friends, you know, sing a song for my friends can make them feel more supportive and it can also help us unwind and contribute to our realization.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and friends. Singing a song for my friends can make them feel more supported, and it can also help us unwind and contribute to our relaxation.

'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. 'Feel more supportive' is incorrect; it should be 'feel more supported'. 'Contribute to our realization' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'relaxation'. Also, the sentence is split for clarity and corrected for grammar and word choice.

× So that is why I I will think to my family and my friends.

✓ So that is why I will think of my family and my friends.

The phrase 'think to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'think of'. Also, the repeated 'I' is removed. The sentence is corrected for preposition use and clarity.

× Oh yes, definitely seeing can bring a lot of positive influence to people's mind and it can also help you inform to help you form a good mood.

✓ Oh yes, definitely singing can bring a lot of positive influence to people's minds, and it can also help you form a good mood.

'Seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. 'People's mind' should be plural 'people's minds'. The phrase 'help you inform to help you form' is incorrect and redundant; corrected to 'help you form'. The sentence is corrected for word choice, pluralization, and clarity.

× And personally, I, I, I always go to the karaoke with my friends and just help help us to just help us online.

✓ And personally, I always go to karaoke with my friends, and it just helps us to unwind.

'The karaoke' should be 'karaoke' without 'the'. The phrase 'help help us to just help us online' is unclear and likely a mistake; corrected to 'helps us to unwind' to convey the intended meaning. Also, subject-verb agreement is corrected with 'helps'. The sentence is corrected for article use, clarity, and grammar.