Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and clear, avoiding redundancy. Also, organize your ideas logically with proper linking words.

例: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child because it helps me express my emotions clearly and comfortably. Singing allows me to open up and share how I feel at any moment.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I have not received formal singing lessons, but my maternal aunt, who loves singing, guided me on how to sing properly for school events. Additionally, I am a member of a choir team, which has helped me improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is honest but a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I usually sing for myself because I am not very confident in my singing ability. Therefore, I prefer to enjoy singing privately rather than performing for others.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, but some sentences are awkward and contain errors. Try to use more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people express and relieve their emotions. For instance, Filipinos often sing during both joyful and sad occasions to uplift their spirits.

× I believe that through singing has me more open to what, how and how I feel during the time, and it's more convenient and it's a more convenient way for me to express whatever I am feeling on a specific.

✓ I believe that singing has made me more open to what, how, and why I feel during the time, and it's a more convenient way for me to express whatever I am feeling at a specific moment.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'through singing has me' which is ungrammatical. The verb phrase should be 'singing has made me' to correctly express the effect of singing. Also, 'on a specific' is incomplete and should be 'at a specific moment' to clarify the time reference.

× On general terms, I did not really undergone any official training.

✓ On general terms, I did not really undergo any official training.

The verb 'undergo' should be in its base form after 'did not' because 'did' already indicates past tense. Using 'undergone' (past participle) here is incorrect.

× However, with the help of my maternal aunt who also loves singing UMM, she gauged me through it on how to properly sing during a a specific event and in school as well.

✓ However, with the help of my maternal aunt who also loves singing, she guided me on how to properly sing during a specific event and in school as well.

The phrase 'gauged me through it' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'guided' and the preposition 'on' is used to indicate the topic of guidance. Also, 'a a' is a typo and should be 'a'.

× I would personally sing for myself. I am not very good at it though, so that is that might be the reason why I might not feel us singing it to other people.

✓ I would personally sing for myself. I am not very good at it though, so that might be the reason why I might not feel like singing it to other people.

The phrase 'feel us singing it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'feel like singing it'. The pronoun 'us' is wrongly used here.

× I do believe that singing can help people alleviate of whatever they're feeling or their emotion during the time taking.

✓ I do believe that singing can help people alleviate whatever they're feeling or their emotions during that time.

The verb 'alleviate' should not be followed by the preposition 'of'. Also, 'their emotion' should be plural 'their emotions' to match the plural subject 'people'. 'During the time taking' is awkward and should be 'during that time'.

× For example, Filipinos are fond of singing whether it's a happy occasion or even a sad 1 to elevate those feelings that they have.

✓ For example, Filipinos are fond of singing whether it's a happy occasion or even a sad one to elevate those feelings that they have.

The numeral '1' is incorrectly used instead of the word 'one' to refer to 'occasion'. Using 'one' is grammatically correct in this context.