Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and detailed, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress. For example, I often sing a calming song while showering, which makes me feel peaceful, almost like having my own private karaoke session.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues, making it hard to understand. Try to organize your ideas clearly with correct sentence structures and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. At my school, there was an after-school singing club hosted by a teacher. I joined the club because I wanted to learn how to sing properly, and it helped me improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors, which affect understanding. Focus on organizing your ideas logically, using correct grammar, and linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: If I had the chance, I would sing for my best friend. I would choose the song "Seven Years" by Lukas Graham because it talks about growing up, which I think he would appreciate. Although I wasn't good at singing before, now I want to impress him with my improved skills.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to express your points more clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For me, after a stressful day, singing helps me relax and feel happier. I think many people would agree that singing can improve their mood and bring joy.

× Like I would have one serenity song that if I sing it would give me more calm and more peace.

✓ Like I have one serenity song that if I sing it, it gives me more calm and more peace.

The phrase 'would have' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'have' to indicate possession. Also, 'would give' should be 'gives' to express a general truth in the present tense.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing because other school I go to we have like an after school activity that the teacher will have like their own club and wanted that issue that I know he hosted a singing club and I was very interested in to know like how to sync properly.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing because at the other school I go to, we have an after-school activity where the teacher has their own club, and I know he hosted a singing club. I was very interested in learning how to sing properly.

The original sentence has multiple tense and structure errors. 'Wanted that issue that I know' is unclear and incorrect. 'Sync' should be 'sing'. The sentence is corrected to use present perfect and simple present appropriately, and to clarify meaning.

× If I had the choice and president of thing for I will probably shows my best friend and install the other thing for him is called Seven years by Lucas Gray Ham, because the song conveys and ideas of how a man getting grow up every day and every day an I like to sing for him because he know that I'm not very good thing here.

✓ If I had the choice and the opportunity, I would probably show my best friend and install the other thing for him called 'Seven Years' by Lukas Graham, because the song conveys ideas of how a man grows up every day. I like to sing for him because he knows that I'm not very good at singing.

The sentence contains many errors: 'president of thing' is unclear and replaced with 'opportunity'; 'shows' should be 'show'; 'install the other thing' is unclear and omitted; 'Lucas Gray Ham' corrected to 'Lukas Graham'; 'getting grow up' corrected to 'grows up'; 'he know' corrected to 'he knows'; 'thing here' corrected to 'at singing'.

× Yes, absolutely, because even for me staying has been playing a big role in my life for a very long time.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because singing has been playing a big role in my life for a very long time.

The word 'staying' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'singing' to match the topic. The present perfect continuous tense 'has been playing' is correctly used here.

× Because after a whole day of me dealing with the stress, when I get to think it's like a moment for me to relieve my stress out an have more hapiness so that I think other people would agree with me an by that adding other people would have hapiness.

✓ After a whole day of dealing with stress, when I get to sing, it's like a moment for me to relieve my stress and have more happiness. I think other people would agree with me, and by that, other people would have happiness too.

The sentence had incorrect conjunctions and awkward phrasing. 'An' should be 'and'; 'get to think' corrected to 'get to sing'; 'hapiness' corrected to 'happiness'; sentence split for clarity and correct conjunction use.